Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Daha doğal ve akıcı cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, cevabınızı doğrudan soruya yanıtlayıp, ardından nedenlerini açık ve net bir şekilde belirtin. Örneğin, gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve cümlenizi tamamlayın.

例: No, there are not many crosswalks near my home because the local government thinks they are too expensive to build. They believe that people can cross the road safely without them, so they haven't constructed many.

提案: Cevabınızda cümle yapısı ve anlam bütünlüğü eksik. Düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bir şekilde ifade edin. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlelerinizi birbirine bağlayın ve detaylandırın.

例: Yes, I would like to have more crosswalks and stricter rules for getting a driver's license. Also, adding more traffic lights would help control the traffic better, and I hope drivers become more patient on the roads.

× No, actually it's not because our ******* government don't want to make any crosswalk in the way in the road because it is too expensive.

✓ No, actually it's not because our ******* government doesn't want to make any crosswalks on the road because it is too expensive.

The subject 'government' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' instead of 'don't'. Also, 'crosswalk' should be plural 'crosswalks' to match the context, and the preposition 'in the way in the road' is incorrect; it should be 'on the road'.

× They thinking like this and we don't need it.

✓ They think like this and we don't need it.

The verb 'thinking' is incorrectly used in the present continuous form here; the simple present 'think' is appropriate to express a habitual action or belief.

× Like they don't even they don't even think we need we need to have a.

✓ They don't even think we need to have one.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive. It should be restructured to a clear, complete sentence without repetition and with a proper object ('one' referring to a crosswalk).

× Yes, I had more crosswalks make harder to take driver license and add more light traffic lights.

✓ Yes, I would like more crosswalks, make it harder to get a driver's license, and add more traffic lights.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'had' and lacks proper modal verbs and articles. 'Would like' expresses desire, 'make it harder' is clearer, and 'driver license' should be 'driver's license'. Also, 'light traffic lights' is redundant; 'traffic lights' suffices.

× Absolutely and make all of the drivers be patient.

✓ Absolutely, and make all drivers be patient.

The sentence lacks a modal verb to express intention or desire. Adding 'should' or restructuring the sentence would improve clarity, e.g., 'and make all drivers be patient' or 'and ensure all drivers are patient.'