Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrasing. To improve, try to use correct prepositions and articles, and organize your answer more clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, there are not many crosswalks around where I live because I live in a quiet village called Bhaktapur. However, there are a few crosswalks on the inner roads near my home.

提案: Your answer attempts to respond but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, clearly state what changes you want and why, using correct sentence structure and linking words. Be specific about the changes you want and avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, I would like the government to pay more attention to traffic management in my village. Since it is not very crowded, it is often ignored, but better traffic signs and crosswalks would improve safety for residents.

× No, I live in a away from the roads and the traffic.

✓ No, I live away from the roads and the traffic.

The phrase 'in a away' is incorrect because 'away' is an adverb and does not require a preposition 'in' or an article 'a' before it. The correct expression is simply 'I live away from the roads and the traffic.'

× there are not much crosswalk around the places

✓ there are not many crosswalks around the places

'Crosswalk' is countable, so the plural form 'crosswalks' should be used. Also, 'much' is used with uncountable nouns; for countable nouns like 'crosswalks', 'many' is appropriate.

× there are some in the inner side Rd. which are in my homes and there.

✓ there are some on the inner side road near my home and there.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to locations on a road; 'on' is the correct preposition. Also, 'homes' should be singular 'home' if referring to the student's residence, and 'there' is vague; 'near my home and there' clarifies location.

× there are many things that I would like to change in the traffic in my areas.

✓ there are many things that I would like to change about the traffic in my area.

'Areas' should be singular 'area' if referring to the student's local region. Also, the preposition 'in' is less appropriate than 'about' when talking about changes related to traffic.

× Like as my the village is not much crowded, it is normally ignored by the government.

✓ Since my village is not very crowded, it is normally ignored by the government.

The phrase 'Like as' is incorrect; 'Since' or 'Because' is appropriate to introduce a reason. Also, 'my the village' is redundant; 'my village' suffices. 'Not much crowded' should be 'not very crowded' for correct adjective usage.

× So I would make them to to notice my village and make many traffic.

✓ So I would make them notice my village and improve the traffic conditions.

The phrase 'make them to to notice' is incorrect; 'make them notice' is correct without 'to'. Also, 'make many traffic' is ungrammatical; 'improve the traffic conditions' conveys the intended meaning clearly.