Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有一定信息但表达不够自然且有重复。需要更直接地回答问题，避免冗余和语法错误，并补充具体细节（例如数量或位置）以增加内容的清晰度和说服力。注意主谓搭配和去掉重复短语。

例: There are only a few crosswalks near my university, mainly at major intersections. Because they are limited, pedestrians often have to walk farther to find a safe crossing, which can be inconvenient and unsafe.

提案: 回答含糊且有多处语法和逻辑错误，信息重复。应给出一个明确的主题句，接着用一到两句具体说明要改进的措施及其原因，并使用衔接词使逻辑清晰。避免使用含糊的词组如“maybe don't have”。

例: Yes. Firstly, I would ask the local government to optimize traffic light timing at busy junctions so vehicles and pedestrians flow more smoothly. For example, adjusting signal phases during rush hour could reduce congestion and shorten waiting times.

× There are a few crosswalks around my university and I think this is a basic frustration of traffic in the city and it can it can guarantee the pedestrian's safety.

✓ There are a few crosswalks around my university, and I think this is a basic feature of traffic in the city and it can guarantee pedestrians' safety.

原句中有几个问题：1) “basic frustration of traffic” 用词不当，意思不清，改为 “basic feature of traffic”（基本特征）更符合语境；2) “the pedestrian's safety” 使用了单数所有格，通常谈论一类人的安全用复数或不加定冠词，改为 “pedestrians' safety”；3) 去掉重复的 “it can it can”。建议：注意名词单复数的使用（谈论群体用复数或复数所有格），并检查重复词和搭配是否恰当。

× Yes, of course. I think firstly government needs to improve the traffic lights such as the timing and and turnover because sometimes people maybe don't have because sometimes traffic lights may be caused the traffic jam.

✓ Yes, of course. I think, firstly, the government needs to improve the traffic lights, such as the timing and sequence, because sometimes traffic lights can cause traffic jams.

原句问题较多：1) 缺少定冠词 “the government”；2) “and and turnover” 有重复且 “turnover” 用词不当，改为 “sequence”（信号顺序）更合适；3) “people maybe don't have” 是残句，删除；4) “traffic lights may be caused the traffic jam” 语序与被动用法错误，且意义不明确，改为主动句 “traffic lights can cause traffic jams”。建议：注意使用定冠词 the 与名词搭配，避免词语重复，选择恰当的词（sequence 而非 turnover），并使用正确的主谓宾语序或恰当的被动结构。