Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Please try to make your answers more clear and coherent. Use complete sentences and avoid grammatical errors. For example, explain why you like shopping and where you usually go, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I like shopping because it helps me relax and unwind after a busy day. I usually go to the mall near my house since it is very convenient and has many stores, which makes the experience enjoyable.

提案: Focus on answering the question directly with clear and complete sentences. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I want to spend my money efficiently. This way, I can make sure I get good value for the price I pay.

提案: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid unclear or incorrect words.

例: No, I am not an indecisive person, but sometimes it takes me some time to make a decision when shopping. This is because I want to spend my money efficiently, as money is hard to earn.

提案: Provide a balanced answer with clear reasoning and examples. Use linking words to compare ideas and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: I think expensive products are often better because they are made of high-quality materials and come from well-known brands. However, some cheaper products can also be good quality, so price is not always the best indicator.

× I like shopping. Because it made me feel relax and unwind my busy day.

✓ I like shopping because it makes me feel relaxed and helps me unwind after my busy day.

The original sentence is a fragment; 'Because it made me feel relax and unwind my busy day' is not a complete sentence. Also, 'made' should be 'makes' to match present tense, 'relax' should be 'relaxed' (adjective), and 'unwind my busy day' should be 'helps me unwind after my busy day' for clarity and correctness.

× I usually go to the wall near my house in his very convenient and there are many defense or fix for.

✓ I usually go to the mall near my house; it is very convenient and there are many shops or facilities.

The word 'wall' should be 'mall'. 'In his very convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'it is very convenient'. 'Defense or fix for' is unclear and likely meant to be 'shops or facilities'. Prepositions and word choices are incorrect here.

× Wish make it. Did more enjoyable experience?

✓ I wish it made my experience more enjoyable.

The original sentences are fragments and unclear. They need to be combined into a complete sentence expressing a wish about making the experience more enjoyable.

× I always hoped that overpriced when I shop.

✓ I always hope to avoid overpriced items when I shop.

'Hoped' is past tense and does not fit here; 'hope' is present tense. Also, 'that overpriced' is incorrect; it should be 'to avoid overpriced items'. Modal verb usage and sentence structure need correction.

× First of all because. I want to spend my money efficiently.

✓ First of all, I want to spend my money efficiently.

'First of all because.' is a sentence fragment and incorrect. It should be combined with the next sentence for clarity and correctness.

× And ensure that I get the product for the price and. Label that I spend.

✓ And ensure that I get the product for the price on the label that I pay.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Label that I spend' is incorrect; it should be 'label that I pay'. The sentence needs to be combined and clarified.

× As I am not really indecisive person.

✓ I am not really an indecisive person.

The phrase 'As I am not really indecisive person' is incorrect because it lacks an article before 'indecisive person' and 'As' is unnecessary here.

× Eyes always Hicks time to make a decision, especially when I go shopping.

✓ It always takes time to make a decision, especially when I go shopping.

'Eyes always Hicks time' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'It always takes time'.

× As I said earlier, I want to spend my money. As efficient as possible because money is something that is hard to get.

✓ As I said earlier, I want to spend my money as efficiently as possible because money is something that is hard to get.

The sentence is fragmented; 'As efficient as possible' should be 'as efficiently as possible' and connected to the previous sentence.

× Of course, expensive products. Operated as you pull wins 'cause most of the time because it's made of high quality materials such as brand name products.

✓ Of course, expensive products are often better because most of the time they are made of high-quality materials, such as brand-name products.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'Operated as you pull wins'. It needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× However, there's a lot more products are cheap and also. Go in quality.

✓ However, there are also many products that are cheap and of good quality.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Go in quality' is incorrect; it should be 'of good quality'. The sentence needs to be combined and clarified.