Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and clarify your ideas. Avoid using incorrect words like 'helmet' instead of 'help' or 'way'. Also, keep your answer concise and natural, avoiding redundancy.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping a lot. I often go window shopping to relax and sometimes buy my favourite items, especially when I go with my friends to a big shopping mall.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and clearly, using linking words to explain your reasons. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words and focus on coherence.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices when I buy expensive items to make sure I get a good deal. However, for cheaper things like clothes or shoes, I don't always compare prices carefully.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'choose the background'. Try to use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I often find it difficult to make choices when shopping. Therefore, I usually bring my parents or friends with me to help choose the best items.

提案: Your answer is very unclear and contains many mistakes and irrelevant words. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use correct grammar and vocabulary relevant to the topic.

例: Yes, I believe expensive products are usually better than cheaper ones because well-known brands often guarantee higher quality and reliability.

× I enjoy. Window shopping is a helmet to unwind myself and also to buy my favorite items by shopping with my friends in a big shopping mall.

✓ I enjoy window shopping as a way to unwind myself and also to buy my favorite items by shopping with my friends in a big shopping mall.

The original sentence incorrectly separates 'I enjoy' and 'Window shopping' into two sentences, which disrupts the flow and meaning. 'Enjoy' should be followed directly by the gerund form 'window shopping' to indicate the activity enjoyed. Also, 'helmet' is incorrect here; it should be 'help' to convey the intended meaning.

× Window shopping is a helmet to unwind myself and also to buy my favorite items by shopping with my friends in a big shopping mall.

✓ Window shopping is a help to unwind myself and also to buy my favorite items by shopping with my friends in a big shopping mall.

The word 'helmet' is a misused noun here; the correct word is 'help' to express that window shopping assists in unwinding. This is a vocabulary error affecting the prepositional phrase's meaning.

× Window shopping is a helmet to unwind myself and also to buy my favorite items by shopping with my friends in a big shopping mall.

✓ Window shopping is a help to unwind myself and also to buy my favorite items by shopping with my friends in a big shopping mall.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is acceptable here but could be improved by using 'me' for naturalness. However, since the instruction is to correct only grammar problems listed, this is acceptable.

× Why? It depends where I need to buy some expensive items, I would compare the price to make the price more affordable.

✓ Why? It depends. When I need to buy some expensive items, I compare the prices to make them more affordable.

The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and uses 'depends where' incorrectly. It should be 'depends' followed by a period, then 'When I need to buy...' to clarify the condition. Also, 'compare the price' should be plural 'compare the prices' because multiple prices are compared.

× I would compare the price to make the price more affordable.

✓ I would compare the prices to make them more affordable.

When comparing, multiple prices are involved, so 'prices' should be plural. Also, 'the price' in the second instance should be replaced with 'them' to avoid repetition and maintain clarity.

× Xan all also suitable for me to buy.

✓ It is also suitable for me to buy.

The phrase 'Xan all' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Assuming the intended meaning is 'It is also suitable for me to buy,' the pronoun 'it' is necessary to refer to the item. The original lacks a subject pronoun.

× But if I buy some codes or some shoes, those trip of items I leveled compare the price.

✓ But if I buy some clothes or some shoes, for those types of items I usually compare the prices.

'Codes' is likely a mishearing of 'clothes.' 'Trip of items' should be 'types of items.' 'Leveled compare the price' is incorrect; it should be 'usually compare the prices.' Plural forms are needed for 'types' and 'prices' because multiple items and prices are involved.

× Absolutely, I have difficulties or making choices.

✓ Absolutely, I have difficulties in making choices.

The phrase 'or making choices' is incorrect; it should be 'in making choices' to correctly express the difficulty experienced. The verb tense is present perfect 'have difficulties,' so the gerund 'making' is appropriate with the preposition 'in'.

× Is is difficult for me to to choose the background.

✓ It is difficult for me to choose the background.

The sentence has repeated words 'Is is' and 'to to,' which are errors. Also, the subject 'It' is needed to start the sentence properly. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So I always bring my parents or friends accompanying me to go shopping and to help me to choose the best one.

✓ So I always bring my parents or friends to accompany me when I go shopping and to help me choose the best one.

The phrase 'bring my parents or friends accompanying me' is incorrect. It should be 'bring my parents or friends to accompany me.' Also, 'help me to choose' can be simplified to 'help me choose.' These corrections improve pronoun and verb usage.

× Yes, I. Absolutely's faint that nurseries brothers always better than shipper ones because they they they are brands guarantees the Cortese also be more true worth so that we can buy more reliable products here.

✓ Yes, I absolutely think that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because they are brand guarantees and the cost is more worthwhile, so we can buy more reliable products here.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains many errors: 'Absolutely's faint' should be 'absolutely think'; 'nurseries brothers' is a mishearing of 'expensive products'; 'shipper ones' should be 'cheaper ones'; repeated 'they' is an error; 'brands guarantees' should be 'brand guarantees'; 'Cortese' is 'cost'; 'more true worth' should be 'more worthwhile.' The corrected sentence improves sentence structure, clarity, and grammar.