Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant and shows enthusiasm, but there are some grammatical errors and redundancy. Avoid repeating words like 'for' twice and incorrect phrases like 'last yesterday'. Also, try to keep your answer concise and avoid unnecessary details. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it allows me to explore new places and discover different products. Moreover, it serves as a good recreational activity when I have free time. For instance, yesterday I visited a street market and bought two pairs of shoes.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Avoid incorrect tense usage like 'when I saw' and incomplete sentences such as 'It is more good'. Use linking words like 'because' properly and provide clear reasons. Try to use more precise vocabulary instead of 'more good'.

例: Yes, I definitely compare prices when I shop because it helps me understand the cost and quality of products. If I find two products of the same quality but different prices, I usually choose the cheaper one because it offers better value for money.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some awkward phrasing and redundancy. Avoid repeating 'sometimes' and incorrect words like 'shop our'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'but' correctly to connect ideas. Try to be more concise and specific about your difficulties in making choices.

例: Yes, it can be difficult for me to make choices when shopping because there are many attractive dresses, which sometimes confuses me. However, I have to stick to my budget, so I usually have to choose carefully between two options.

提案: Your answer expresses a clear opinion but uses repetitive and unnatural phrases like 'always made-up of higher quality' and 'persons who made expensive products'. Try to use more natural expressions and avoid absolute statements like 'always'. Provide balanced reasoning and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I believe that expensive products are often better than cheaper ones because they tend to be made with higher quality materials and by skilled professionals. However, this is not always the case, as some affordable products can also be of good quality.

× Like for example last yesterday I went to a street market to buy 2 pair of shoes for me.

✓ Like for example last yesterday I went to a street market to buy 2 pairs of shoes for me.

The word 'pair' should be pluralized to 'pairs' when referring to more than one. Here, '2 pair' is incorrect; it should be '2 pairs' to agree in number with the quantity.

× Yes definitely I do compare prices when I saw because it gives me a rough idea of the prices and the quality of the product.

✓ Yes definitely I do compare prices when I shop because it gives me a rough idea of the prices and the quality of the product.

The phrase 'when I saw' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant 'when I shop' to indicate the present habitual action. Using 'saw' (past tense of 'see') here is inappropriate and causes confusion.

× Plus if I have seen another product of the same quality but at different prices so I prefer to buy.

✓ Plus, if I see another product of the same quality but at different prices, I prefer to buy the cheaper one.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'If I have seen' is incorrect for habitual or general statements; 'if I see' is better. Also, the sentence lacks a main clause and proper punctuation. The correction clarifies the condition and result.

× The cheaper one because. It is more good.

✓ The cheaper one because it is better.

The sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect comparative form 'more good'. The correct comparative adjective is 'better'. Also, the sentence should be combined properly without a period after 'because'.

× Certainly yes, sometimes it happens when it is difficult for me to make a choice when I shop our because sometimes there are so many good dresses and clothes within which I get confused.

✓ Certainly yes, sometimes it is difficult for me to make a choice when I shop because there are so many good dresses and clothes, which makes me confused.

The original sentence is awkward and contains unnecessary words like 'our' and 'within'. The correction removes these and restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But I also have to be in budget so I usually have to make a hard choice between 2 dresses.

✓ But I also have to be on a budget so I usually have to make a hard choice between 2 dresses.

The phrase 'be in budget' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'be on a budget'. Also, '2 dresses' is correct here as 'dresses' is plural.

× I think that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because expensive products are always made-up of higher quality and the persons who made expensive products are always the professional ones.

✓ I think that expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because expensive products are always made of higher quality materials and the people who make expensive products are always professionals.

The phrase 'made-up of' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'made of'. Also, 'persons' is less natural than 'people' in this context. 'Made' should be present tense 'make' to agree with the general statement. 'Professional ones' is better expressed as 'professionals'.