Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, be more specific about what you like to shop for. For example, instead of 'being a gold shopping', say 'shopping is one of my favorite activities'.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping. I often buy accessories like watches and jewelry, as well as household items. Shopping brings me a lot of joy because I like finding things that improve my daily life.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas. For example, explain briefly why comparing prices is important and how bargaining helps.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I learned from my mother that bargaining can help you get better deals. By comparing prices, I can find the most affordable option without sacrificing quality.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating 'sometimes'. Also, clarify your reasoning more specifically.

例: Sometimes, I find it hard to choose between products because many of them look appealing. However, I usually compare prices and bargain before making a final decision.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Avoid repeating similar ideas and explain your opinion with more specific reasons.

例: I believe expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones. It depends on how satisfied you are with the product. Sometimes, cheaper items can meet your needs just as well as expensive ones.

× Indeed, being a gold shopping is one of my favorite thing.

✓ Indeed, going shopping is one of my favorite things.

The phrase 'being a gold shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'going shopping'. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with 'one of my favorite'. This corrects the singular/plural mismatch and uses the correct expression.

× I like to shop a lot of accessories for me, a lot of a household things and a lot of other things which give me a good joy in my life.

✓ I like to shop for a lot of accessories for myself, a lot of household things, and a lot of other things which give me great joy in my life.

The phrase 'a lot of a household things' is incorrect; 'a' should be removed. Also, 'for me' is better expressed as 'for myself' to reflect the correct pronoun use. 'Good joy' is unnatural; 'great joy' is more appropriate.

× I would say I always compare the prices when I shop because I learned it from my mother.

✓ I would say I always compare prices when I shop because I learned it from my mother.

The modal verb 'would' is acceptable here as a polite expression. The phrase 'compare the prices' is better as 'compare prices' for natural usage. No modal verb error, but slight improvement in phrasing.

× Like how to bargain to get the things and we can get the things at lower price if we bargain and compare the prices of the goods.

✓ Like how to bargain to get things, and we can get things at a lower price if we bargain and compare the prices of the goods.

The phrase 'at lower price' needs the article 'a' to be 'at a lower price'. Also, 'the things' is better as 'things' for general reference.

× I would say sometime it seems difficult for me to make choices between the goods and services I buy because everything seems so interesting and joyful to me.

✓ I would say sometimes it seems difficult for me to make choices between the goods and services I buy because everything seems so interesting and joyful to me.

The adverb 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. This is an adverb usage issue but relates to plural form of time expressions.

× So sometime I bargain and compare the prices and then I make a choice.

✓ So sometimes I bargain and compare prices, and then I make a choice.

Again, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Also, 'the prices' can be simplified to 'prices' for natural usage.

× I would say sometime the expensive products are better, but not always.

✓ I would say sometimes the expensive products are better, but not always.

The adverb 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× Sometimes you get the more satisfaction with the cheaper ones, not the expensive ones.

✓ Sometimes you get more satisfaction with the cheaper ones, not the expensive ones.

The phrase 'the more satisfaction' is incorrect; 'more satisfaction' without 'the' is correct here.