Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免使用不完整的句子，如“Which makes the experience more enjoyable.”，应将其与前一句合并，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Absolutely yes. I really enjoy shopping because it makes me feel happy and relaxed after a busy day. For example, I usually go shopping with my parents on weekends, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: 回答中出现了疑问句“Are you sure”，不符合直接回答问题的要求。应直接陈述观点，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because it helps me find better deals and save money, which is important for my budget.

提案: 回答中“my better deals”表达不准确，应改为“better deals for myself”或“good deals”。同时，句子结构可以更自然。

例: I don't find it difficult to make choices when shopping because by comparing prices and brands, I can easily find good deals and save money.

提案: 回答中断断续续，句子不完整，影响表达的连贯性。应将观点完整表达出来，避免重复和停顿。

例: No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. It depends on the quality and the price of the product.

× Which makes the experience more enjoyable.

✓ This makes the experience more enjoyable.

原句是一个不完整的句子，缺少主语，导致句子结构错误。应补充主语使句子完整。

× Are you sure I compare prices when I'm shopping 'cause it can help me find better deals and save money, which is important for my budget.

✓ Yes, I do compare prices when I'm shopping because it can help me find better deals and save money, which is important for my budget.

原句中使用了疑问句“Are you sure”不符合语境，且口语缩写“'cause”不正式。应使用肯定句表达观点，且用完整的“because”。

× By comparing prices and the brand, I can easily find my better deals and save money.

✓ By comparing prices and brands, I can easily find better deals and save money.

“the brand”使用不当，应该用复数形式“brands”表示一般概念，且“my better deals”中“my”不合适，应去掉。

× I think. It depends on the quality and the. Price.

✓ I think it depends on the quality and the price.

原句断句错误，导致句子不连贯，应合并为完整句子。