Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและคำที่ไม่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'Is is' ควรเป็น 'It is' และควรจัดระเบียบประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และมีความหมายชัดเจน เช่น อธิบายว่าการช็อปปิ้งช่วยให้รู้สึกผ่อนคลายอย่างไร

例: Yes, I like shopping because it helps me relax when I feel unhappy. Walking around and looking for things I want makes me feel better and forget my worries.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น 'because' และ 'not only... but also' และควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'quality' แทน 'equality' และอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน

例: Yes, I usually compare prices when I shop because I have a limited budget. Not only do I look at the price, but I also consider the quality to make sure I get good value for my money.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'because' และ 'for example' รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'overthinking' และ 'suggestions' และจัดระเบียบคำตอบให้กระชับและชัดเจน

例: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices when shopping because I tend to overthink. For example, when buying gifts for my friends, I usually ask my family or friends for their suggestions.

提案: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เข้าใจ เช่น 'U shapped issued' และควรอธิบายตัวอย่างอย่างชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างที่ดี

例: I don't think expensive products are always better. For example, skincare products come in different types, prices, and qualities. It's important to choose the one that suits your skin type to get the best results.

× Is is one of my favorite way to get rid of your feeling about unhappy or sad or anything, so I think.

✓ It is one of my favorite ways to get rid of feelings of unhappiness or sadness, I think.

The subject 'way' is singular, so 'favorite way' is correct, but 'way' should be pluralized to 'ways' to match the context of multiple ways. Also, 'your feeling about unhappy or sad' is incorrect; it should be 'feelings of unhappiness or sadness' to correctly express the idea.

× Is is one of my favorite way to get rid of your feeling about unhappy or sad or anything, so I think.

✓ It is one of my favorite ways to get rid of feelings of unhappiness or sadness, I think.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrectly used when the speaker should refer to their own feelings, so 'feelings' without 'your' or 'my feelings' is appropriate here.

× Shopping is can make it relax by.

✓ Shopping can help me relax.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'Shopping is can make it relax by' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'Shopping can help me relax' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Walking, allow and look for anything you want.

✓ Walking around and looking for anything you want.

The phrase 'allow and look for' is incorrect; 'allow' is not appropriate here. The correct phrase is 'walking around and looking for' to describe the activity properly.

× Guess I'll weigh compared the price when I was shopping.

✓ I guess I weigh prices when I shop.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used with 'weigh compared the price'. The correct expression is 'I weigh prices' or 'I compare prices' when shopping. Also, tense consistency is important; present tense is better here.

× Guess I'll weigh compared the price when I was shopping.

✓ I guess I compare prices when I shop.

The phrase 'compared the price when I was shopping' mixes past tense unnecessarily. Since the question is general, present tense 'compare prices when I shop' is appropriate.

× I can only afford other thing that it enough for my budget an I not only compare about their price, I already compare about equality.

✓ I can only afford other things that are enough for my budget, and I not only compare their prices, I also compare quality.

'Other thing' should be plural 'other things' to match the context. Also, 'it enough' should be 'are enough' to agree with plural 'things'. 'Equality' is incorrect; the intended word is 'quality'.

× I not only compare about their price, I already compare about equality.

✓ I not only compare their prices, I also compare quality.

The preposition 'about' is unnecessary after 'compare'. The verb 'compare' is directly followed by the object without 'about'.

× If it good quality I will go.

✓ If it is good quality, I will buy it.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' for present tense 'it is good quality'. Also, 'I will go' is unclear; 'I will buy it' fits the context better.

× Yes I think it difficult if I have to make a choice when I shopping because I am are over thinking people.

✓ Yes, I think it is difficult if I have to make a choice when I am shopping because I am an overthinking person.

The verb 'is' is missing after 'it'. 'I shopping' should be 'I am shopping'. 'I am are' is incorrect; only 'I am' is needed. 'Over thinking people' should be 'an overthinking person'.

× And if I have to buy something, I'm gonna ask my friends or my mom, whoever that can give me your suggestion.

✓ And if I have to buy something, I'm going to ask my friends or my mom, whoever can give me their suggestions.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here; it should be 'their' to refer to suggestions from others. Also, 'whoever that can' should be 'whoever can'.

× Example like when I have to buy gifts for my friends, I already asked about my other friends or my parents.

✓ For example, when I have to buy gifts for my friends, I already ask my other friends or my parents.

'Asked about' is incorrect; it should be 'ask' or 'ask my other friends or parents for advice'. Also, tense consistency suggests present tense 'ask'.

× Uhm, I don't think that expensive product is already better.

✓ Uhm, I don't think that expensive products are always better.

'Product' should be plural 'products' to generalize. 'Is already better' is incorrect; 'are always better' fits the meaning better.

× I think skin care have many typing it many price and quality.

✓ I think skincare has many types with different prices and qualities.

'Skin care' is usually one word 'skincare'. 'Have' should be 'has' for singular 'skincare'. 'Typing' should be 'types'. 'Many price and quality' should be 'different prices and qualities'.

× U shapped issued one that fits for you does can.

✓ You should choose one that fits you and works well.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× U shapped issued one that fits for you does can. Makes your skin better.

✓ You should choose one that fits you and can make your skin better.

'U' should be 'You'. 'Fits for you' should be 'fits you'. The second sentence fragment should be combined for clarity.