Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'or kitchen aleteia'). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, không quá dài và tránh lặp từ.

例: No, I don't really enjoy shopping because I find it time-consuming and sometimes boring. However, I do shop for necessary items like groceries and clothes. For example, last weekend I quickly bought food for the week.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách mạch lạc và tránh ngắt quãng không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'consider about price process' không đúng. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I am not wealthy. Therefore, I need to be careful with my spending and choose the best deals.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cách diễn đạt còn rời rạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh ngắt quãng và dùng từ chính xác hơn như 'distinguish between necessary and unnecessary items'.

例: Yes, it is difficult because there are many items I want to buy. However, I have to distinguish between necessary and unnecessary items to make a good choice.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng và có ví dụ minh họa, nhưng bạn nên tránh dùng nhiều câu ngắn lẻ và lặp từ 'and'. Hãy kết nối các câu với nhau để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. For example, when I was a child, my mom often bought me cheap clothes, which I always wore because they were good quality and suitable for me.

× No actually really enjoy shopping because I find it time consuming and sometimes dreadful.

✓ No, I actually don't really enjoy shopping because I find it time-consuming and sometimes dreadful.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'do' for negation in the present simple tense and misses a comma after 'No'. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective.

× However, I do go out or kitchen aleteia by necessary items like groceries or clothes.

✓ However, I do go out or to the kitchen to buy necessary items like groceries or clothes.

The phrase 'or kitchen aleteia by' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'or to the kitchen to buy' to correctly express the action and location. Prepositions 'to' are needed before 'the kitchen' and 'buy' is the correct verb.

× For example, last weekend I had to buy some food for the week which were quite quick and easy.

✓ For example, last weekend I had to buy some food for the week, which was quite quick and easy.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'buying food' (a singular action), so the verb should be singular 'was' instead of 'were'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which'.

× Yes, because. I'm not wealthy. Therefore I have to. Consider about price process when I shop.

✓ Yes, because I'm not wealthy. Therefore, I have to consider the prices when I shop.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain unnecessary periods. 'Consider about' is incorrect; 'consider' does not require 'about'. Also, 'price process' is unclear and should be 'prices'.

× Yes, because there are many items that I want to buy. However, I have to consider about. Necessary items in unnecessary items.

✓ Yes, because there are many items that I want to buy. However, I have to consider necessary items and unnecessary items.

The phrase 'consider about' is incorrect; 'consider' does not take 'about'. Also, 'in' is incorrect here; 'and' is appropriate to contrast necessary and unnecessary items.

× I need to have. A good choice.

✓ I need to make a good choice.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a verb. The correct expression is 'make a good choice'.