Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use clear and natural sentences, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, avoid phrases like 'I love to do something as it makes me happy to an' which is unclear.

例: Yes, I like shopping because I enjoy wearing new clothes and trying new fashion styles every season. It makes me happy and boosts my confidence when I wear something new.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question with clear reasons and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I usually don't compare prices because they vary from one shop to another, which is normal. So, I focus more on the quality and style rather than just the price.

提案: Your answer has many grammatical errors and unclear words like 'sobbing' and 'bite every clothes'. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, explain your difficulty clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are many new clothes and designs. Since I cannot buy everything, I find it hard to decide which ones to choose.

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs clearer sentence structure and better vocabulary. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid repetition. Try to be more specific about quality differences.

例: No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because many clothes have similar quality. Sometimes, cheaper clothes can be good if you choose them carefully.

× I love to do something as it makes me happy to an.

✓ I love doing something as it makes me happy too.

The phrase 'love to do something' is acceptable, but here 'love doing something' fits better. Also, 'to an' is incorrect; it should be 'too' to express 'also'. The verb form 'doing' is preferred after 'love' when expressing enjoyment of an activity.

× I feel confidence when I buy new clothes and wear it.

✓ I feel confident when I buy new clothes and wear them.

The word 'confidence' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective 'confident' to describe the subject's feeling. Also, 'clothes' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× I usually don't come with a price when I saw because.

✓ I usually don't compare prices when I shop because.

The phrase 'come with a price' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrase is 'compare prices'. Also, 'saw' is incorrect; it should be 'shop' to match the context.

× And. Is normal.

✓ And it is normal.

The sentence fragment 'And. Is normal.' lacks a subject. Adding 'it' as the subject completes the sentence.

× Yes, of course it makes me difficult.

✓ Yes, of course it is difficult for me.

The phrase 'makes me difficult' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'it is difficult for me' to convey the intended meaning.

× To make a choice when I'm doing sobbing as there are a lot of new clothes and new design.

✓ To make a choice when I'm shopping as there are a lot of new clothes and new designs.

The word 'sobbing' is incorrect; it should be 'shopping'. Also, 'design' should be plural 'designs' to match 'a lot of'.

× Yes, I can't bite every clothes so it makes me so difficult to buy new clothes and.

✓ Yes, I can't buy every piece of clothing so it makes it very difficult to buy new clothes.

The word 'bite' is incorrect; it should be 'buy'. 'Every clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural; 'every' should be followed by a singular noun or 'every piece of clothing'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring.

× No, I don't think this expensive products are always better than the cheaper ones as most of the clothes are similarly same as there are difference in little bit quality only and many people clothes are also very good and of good quality if you choose it properly.

✓ No, I don't think these expensive products are always better than the cheaper ones as most of the clothes are similar; there is only a little difference in quality, and many people's clothes are also very good and of good quality if you choose them properly.

The phrase 'this expensive products' is incorrect; 'these' should be used for plural 'products'. 'Similarly same' is redundant; 'similar' suffices. 'There are difference' should be 'there is a difference'. 'Little bit quality' should be 'a little difference in quality'. 'Many people clothes' should be 'many people's clothes'. Pronouns should agree in number and clarity.