Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้คำว่า "online" แทน "or lie" และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำซ้อน นอกจากนี้ควรจัดประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และลื่นไหลมากขึ้น

例: Yes, I like shopping very much. If I have plenty of time, I usually go to department stores to buy things. However, when I am busy, I prefer shopping online because it is more convenient.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น แก้คำว่า "girls" เป็น "goods" และเชื่อมประโยคให้สมบูรณ์ นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของประโยค

例: Yes, I always compare the prices of the goods I want to buy because I want to find good quality products at reasonable prices. This also helps me save money for other things.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้อง เช่น แก้คำว่า "show" เป็น "choose" และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหลและชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: Not really. I can make decisions by myself. I just take a little time to compare the quality, quantity, and price before I choose something. This way, I can get good products.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น แก้คำว่า "our" เป็น "my" และ "platform" เป็น "platforms" รวมถึงจัดประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความชัดเจน

例: Not really. I disagree because some cheaper products can save my money while still having good quality and quantity. Nowadays, there are many platforms where we can find good products.

× I really like shopping either on site or or lie.

✓ I really like shopping either on site or online.

The word 'lie' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'online' to indicate shopping on the internet. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it improves clarity.

× If I have so many times, I would go to shopping in the department store to get some stuff, but if I have no time but I want some interesting stuff, I would get it.

✓ If I have enough time, I would go shopping in the department store to get some stuff, but if I have no time and want some interesting stuff, I would get it online.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect expressions like 'so many times' and 'go to shopping'. Correcting to 'enough time' and 'go shopping' fixes the verb usage and improves sentence structure.

× I compare the price. Of girls that I want to buy because.

✓ I compare the prices of goods that I want to buy because

The word 'girls' is a wrong pronoun here; the intended word is 'goods'. This is a vocabulary error affecting meaning. Also, 'price' should be plural 'prices' to match 'goods'.

× I compare the price. Of girls that I want to buy because.

✓ I compare the prices of goods that I want to buy because

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly punctuated. Combining the two parts into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Ann is help me save money for other things.

✓ and it helps me save money for other things.

'Ann' is a typo for 'and', and 'is help' is incorrect verb form. Correcting to 'and it helps' fixes the pronoun and verb usage.

× I just want to take time a little bit an compare with the quality, quantity and price before I show something I want.

✓ I just want to take a little time and compare the quality, quantity, and price before I choose something I want.

The phrase 'compare with' is incorrect here; 'compare' should be used without 'with' when listing criteria. Also, 'show' is incorrect; 'choose' fits the context better.

× An I can get the good stuff.

✓ And I can get good stuff.

'An' is a typo for 'and'. Also, 'the good stuff' can be simplified to 'good stuff' for naturalness.

× I disagree with that because I think some. Cheaper product can help me save our money, but is has a good quality and quantity an.

✓ I disagree with that because I think some cheaper products can help me save our money, and they have good quality and quantity.

'Product' should be plural 'products' to match 'some'. 'Is has' is incorrect; correct form is 'they have'. 'An' is a typo for 'and'.

× Nowadays it has so many platform, we get the good stuff.

✓ Nowadays, there are so many platforms where we can get good stuff.

The original sentence lacks proper subject and verb agreement. Adding 'there are' and pluralizing 'platform' to 'platforms' corrects the sentence structure.