Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid grammatical errors like 'I enjoyed to do shopping' and unclear phrases such as 'I wished it to Amal'. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially when I find something I really like. For example, last Monday I asked my friend Amal to help me buy a new pair of shoes. However, I usually shop only when I need something, rather than shopping frequently without purpose.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains several grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'I Jack different stores' and 'make more more by this consciously'. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Definitely, I usually compare prices when I shop because it helps me find the best deals and save money. For example, before buying electronics or clothes, I check different stores or online platforms to ensure I'm getting good value. This habit also helps me avoid overpaying and shop more wisely.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes such as 'make choice' instead of 'make choices' and 'when I show up' which is unclear. Try to use correct plural forms and clearer phrases. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I sometimes find it difficult to make choices when I shop, especially when there are many similar products available. For instance, choosing between different brands of the same item can be confusing because I want to get the best quality at a reasonable price.

提案: Your answer is quite good but has minor errors like 'higher quality material' should be 'higher quality materials' and 'at a lower part' is unclear. Use plural forms where needed and clearer expressions. Also, try to use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas.

例: Not always. While expensive products often use higher quality materials and advanced technology, cheaper items can sometimes offer similar functionality at a lower price. Therefore, I think the value depends on the specific product and individual needs rather than just the price.

× Being a shopaholic person, I enjoyed to do shopping more and more.

✓ Being a shopaholic person, I enjoyed doing shopping more and more.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in the '-ing' form, not the infinitive 'to do'. Hence, 'enjoyed doing' is correct.

× But frequently I go for shopping whenever I need it.

✓ But frequently I go shopping whenever I need to.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping'. Also, 'whenever I need it' is vague; 'whenever I need to' is more appropriate.

× For instance, last Monday I wished it to Amal for buying my shoes.

✓ For instance, last Monday I asked Amal to buy my shoes.

The phrase 'wished it to Amal for buying' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'asked' followed by the infinitive 'to buy'. Also, 'wished it' is not appropriate here.

× Otherwise I do not like to do too much shoppings without mean.

✓ Otherwise I do not like to do too much shopping without meaning.

The noun 'shopping' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'shoppings'. Also, 'without mean' is incorrect; it should be 'without meaning'.

× Definitely, I usually compare prices when I shop becauses it helps me find the best deals and save money.

✓ Definitely, I usually compare prices when I shop because it helps me find the best deals and save money.

The word 'becauses' is a typo; the correct word is 'because'.

× For example, before buying electronics or clothes, I Jack different stores or online platform to ensure I'm getting good value.

✓ For example, before buying electronics or clothes, I check different stores or online platforms to ensure I'm getting good value.

The word 'Jack' is incorrect here; the intended verb is likely 'check'. Also, 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' to match 'stores'.

× This habit also prevent implicit parties and make more more by this consciously.

✓ This habit also prevents implicit parties and makes more money by this consciously.

The subject 'habit' is singular, so the verbs should be 'prevents' and 'makes'. Also, 'implicit parties' and 'make more more' are unclear; 'implicit parties' might be a mistake, and 'make more more' should be 'makes more money'.

× Yes, I sometimes find it difficult to make choice when I show up, especially when there are many similar product available.

✓ Yes, I sometimes find it difficult to make a choice when I show up, especially when there are many similar products available.

The phrase 'make choice' needs an article 'a' before 'choice'. Also, 'product' should be plural 'products' to agree with 'many'.

× For example, choosing between different brands of the same item can be confusing because I want to get that best quality at the reasonable price.

✓ For example, choosing between different brands of the same item can be confusing because I want to get the best quality at a reasonable price.

The phrase 'that best quality' should be 'the best quality'. Also, 'the reasonable price' should be 'a reasonable price' as it is not a specific price.

× Not every time. While expensive products often use higher quality material and advanced technology, cheaper items can sometimes offer similar functionality at a lower part.

✓ Not every time. While expensive products often use higher quality materials and advanced technology, cheaper items can sometimes offer similar functionality at a lower price.

'Material' should be plural 'materials' to match 'higher quality'. Also, 'lower part' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lower price'.

× So I think that the value depends on the specific product an individual needs rather than just the price.

✓ So I think that the value depends on the specific product an individual needs, rather than just the price.

A comma is needed before 'rather than' to separate the clauses clearly.