Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by using complete sentences and linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, mention who you go shopping with and why you enjoy it in a clear way.

例: Yes, I like shopping, especially on weekends when I go with my wife and daughter. We often visit the shopping mall to find good deals, and I really enjoy spending time with my family there.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Explain why comparing prices is important with specific reasons.

例: Definitely, I compare prices because the quality of products varies. It is important to find a good balance between price and quality to save money while buying better items.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Use linking words to explain why making choices is difficult and give specific examples.

例: Yes, sometimes it is difficult to make choices when shopping. For example, choosing between different types of jeans like Vasily and Dad jeans can be confusing because there are many options available.

提案: Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting reasons. Use linking words and avoid fragmented sentences. Explain why you think expensive products are better with examples.

例: Yes, I believe expensive products are usually better because they are often branded and made with higher quality materials. For instance, branded clothes fit well and last longer than cheaper ones, which gives me more confidence.

× Specially I go to shopping in weekend with my family, my wife, my daughter.

✓ Especially, I go shopping on weekends with my family, my wife, and my daughter.

The word 'Specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'Especially'. Also, 'go to shopping' should be 'go shopping' because 'shopping' is a verb here. 'In weekend' should be 'on weekends' to use the correct preposition and plural form for habitual action. Adding commas improves clarity.

× Are some things off? In the shopping mall.

✓ Are some things on sale in the shopping mall?

The phrase 'Are some things off?' is unclear and incorrect. The correct expression is 'Are some things on sale?' Also, 'In the shopping mall' should be part of the same sentence to maintain coherence.

× And. I very enjoy. In the shopping.

✓ And I really enjoy shopping.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'I very enjoy' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I really enjoy'. 'In the shopping' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× Definitely I compare the price be 'cause it's depend their quality and price are.

✓ Definitely, I compare the prices because it depends on their quality and price.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'the price' should be plural 'prices' when comparing. 'be 'cause' is informal and incorrect; use 'because'. 'it's depend' should be 'it depends'. 'their quality and price are' is incomplete; better to say 'their quality and price'.

× Making. It is very important.

✓ This is very important.

'Making.' is a fragment and unclear. The sentence should be complete and clear, such as 'This is very important.'

× Price is the very important in. The shopping mall 'cause it is the quality and better.

✓ Price is very important in the shopping mall because it reflects quality and value.

The phrase 'Price is the very important in.' is incorrect; remove 'the' and complete the sentence. 'cause' should be 'because'. 'it is the quality and better' is unclear; better to say 'it reflects quality and value'.

× Save money. Another day.

✓ It helps save money for another day.

The original sentences are fragments and unclear. Combining them into a complete sentence improves clarity.

× Sometime I make the choice is very confused.

✓ Sometimes, I find making choices very confusing.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'I make the choice is very confused' is incorrect; better to say 'I find making choices very confusing'.

× Vasily and Dad jeans where it is very difficult to choice because it is a many type of jeans in.

✓ Jeans and dad jeans are very difficult to choose because there are many types of jeans.

'Vasily' is unclear; likely 'jeans' was intended. 'where it is very difficult to choice' should be 'are very difficult to choose'. 'it is a many type of jeans in' is incorrect; correct form is 'there are many types of jeans'.

× The the expense its products are branded product, it is very. Quality.

✓ The expensive products are branded and of very good quality.

'The the expense its products are branded product' is incorrect and redundant. Correct form is 'The expensive products are branded'. 'it is very. Quality.' is incomplete; better to say 'of very good quality'.

× In Word and it is that very compatible and this is the very fit.

✓ They are very comfortable and fit very well.

The original sentence is unclear and fragmented. 'In Word' is likely a mishearing or error. 'very compatible' should be 'very comfortable'. 'this is the very fit' should be 'fit very well'.

× Are there other than the cheaper one?

✓ Are they better than the cheaper ones?

The sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Are there other than the cheaper one?' should be 'Are they better than the cheaper ones?' to make sense.

× I believe that the expensive product is. Very well and the better.

✓ I believe that the expensive product is very good and better.

The sentence is fragmented and awkward. 'is. Very well and the better' should be 'is very good and better'.

× Confidence in my.

✓ It gives me confidence.

'Confidence in my' is incomplete and incorrect. The correct expression is 'It gives me confidence.'