Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like 'shopaholic person' and 'go for a shopping'. Use clear topic sentences and link your ideas logically. For example, you can say you enjoy shopping during your free time and explain why briefly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping, especially during my free time on weekends. For instance, I often go window shopping because it's relaxing and convenient for me.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Also, try to be more specific about how comparing prices helps you. For example, mention saving money or finding better deals.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop, especially for groceries. This helps me save money because I can choose the store with the best deals.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your feelings and actions clearly. Also, be more specific about why making choices is difficult for you.

例: Yes, I find it hard to make choices when shopping. For example, on my birthday, I struggled to decide between a red or blue dress, so I asked my husband for help because it was quite stressful.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to compare expensive and cheaper products clearly. Also, provide a clearer example related to product quality or value.

例: I think cheaper products can sometimes be more reliable than expensive ones. For example, I often shop at Value Village, where I find good quality items at lower prices.

× Yes, I am very shopaholic person.

✓ Yes, I am a very shopaholic person.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase 'very shopaholic person'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× So whenever I have a free time I I want to go for outing and then I try to go for a shopping.

✓ So whenever I have free time, I want to go out and then I try to go shopping.

The phrase 'a free time' is incorrect because 'time' in this context is uncountable and does not take an article. Also, 'go for outing' should be 'go out' and 'go for a shopping' should be 'go shopping' to be idiomatic and grammatically correct.

× For example on my weekends I usually go for a shopping like a window shopping.

✓ For example, on my weekends I usually go shopping, like window shopping.

The phrase 'go for a shopping' is incorrect; 'shopping' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article. Also, 'a window shopping' should be 'window shopping' without an article.

× It's very convenient for me as well as I.

✓ It's very convenient for me as well as for others.

The phrase 'as well as I' is incorrect because 'I' is a subject pronoun and does not fit here. The intended meaning is likely 'as well as for others' or 'as well as for myself'.

× Of course, I compare prices whenever I go for a shopping.

✓ Of course, I compare prices whenever I go shopping.

'Go for a shopping' is incorrect because 'shopping' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article or 'for' in this context.

× I usually compare the prices with another store so that I so that it so that I I will not spend too much on my groceries, so it's really convenient for me and.

✓ I usually compare the prices at another store so that I will not spend too much on my groceries, so it's really convenient for me.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; 'compare prices at another store' is the correct usage. Also, the sentence had repeated phrases and an incomplete ending, which were corrected for clarity.

× Yes, it's very difficult for me to make choice when I whenever I go for shopping.

✓ Yes, it's very difficult for me to make a choice whenever I go shopping.

The noun 'choice' is countable and singular here, so it requires the article 'a'. Also, 'go for shopping' should be 'go shopping'.

× For example, on my birthday I I was feeling like terrible when I when I have to choose one dress in between red or blue colour.

✓ For example, on my birthday I was feeling terrible when I had to choose one dress between red or blue colour.

The phrase 'was feeling like terrible' is incorrect; it should be 'was feeling terrible'. Also, 'have to choose' should be in past tense 'had to choose' to match the past context. 'In between' should be 'between'.

× So I take help from my husband.

✓ So I took help from my husband.

The verb tense should be past tense 'took' to match the past context. The preposition 'from' is correct here.

× Well, I believe that sometime cheaper products are more reliable and more useful rather than expensive one.

✓ Well, I believe that sometimes cheaper products are more reliable and more useful than expensive ones.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Rather than' is better replaced with 'than' for comparison. 'Expensive one' should be plural 'expensive ones' to match 'products'.

× For example, whenever I have a time I try to go go to value village that that is place where people go and do their items.

✓ For example, whenever I have time I try to go to Value Village, which is a place where people go and sell their items.

'A time' is incorrect because 'time' is uncountable here. 'Value Village' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. 'That that is place' should be 'which is a place'. 'Do their items' is unclear; likely intended 'sell their items'.