Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks fluency. Try to form complete sentences and avoid pauses or fillers. Also, provide a clear reason why you prefer online shopping, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I like shopping, especially online shopping because it is more convenient and comfortable. For example, I can shop from home without having to visit multiple stores.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Make sure to finish your sentences and explain your reasons clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because it helps me find the best deals and avoid overpaying for clothes.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Avoid unclear phrases and incomplete thoughts.

例: No, it is not difficult for me to make choices when I shop because I usually buy from well-known stores that I trust.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks supporting details. Avoid hesitation and finish your sentences. Provide reasons or examples to support your opinion using linking words.

例: No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because sometimes cheaper items have similar quality and are more affordable.

× In my opinion, online shopping it's more. Comfortable. The shop around, yeah.

✓ In my opinion, online shopping is more comfortable than shopping around, yeah.

The adverb 'more' should be placed before the adjective 'comfortable' without a period separating them. Also, the phrase 'The shop around' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'shopping around' to make sense in context.

× I compare price when I go to the shopping because it's very comfortable and you don't overpay for clothing and.

✓ I compare prices when I go shopping because it's very comfortable and you don't overpay for clothing.

The noun 'price' should be plural 'prices' because multiple items are compared. Also, 'go to the shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'go shopping'. The sentence was incomplete and the conjunction 'and' at the end is unnecessary.

× Now, is it not difficult for me to make a choice when I shop because I prefer iconic shop and bought?

✓ Now, it is not difficult for me to make a choice when I shop because I prefer iconic shops and have bought from them.

The sentence structure is incorrect and confusing. The question form 'is it not' is inappropriate here. Also, 'iconic shop' should be plural 'iconic shops' and the verb 'bought' needs an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense.

× In my opinion, expensive products not are always better than cheaper ones because.

✓ In my opinion, expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones because.

The negation 'not' should come after the verb 'are' to form the correct word order 'are not'. The sentence is incomplete but the correction focuses on the word order error.