Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, instead of repeating 'weekend days' and using 'for buy', you can say 'I usually go to shopping malls on weekends to buy my favorite or necessary items.' Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to make it more coherent.

例: Yes, I like shopping very much. However, as a student, I don't have much free time. Therefore, I usually go to shopping malls on weekends to buy my favorite or necessary items.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Avoid repeating 'because' at the start of sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'however' to connect ideas. Also, correct grammar such as 'ask me to give' should be 'ask me to pay'. Try to be more concise and clear.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because it helps me save money. For example, one store may charge a high price for an item, but another store might sell the same item for less. Therefore, comparing prices is very important.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contradictory. Saying 'sometimes it's difficult' and 'I don't make any choices' confuses the listener. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'So yeah'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: It depends on the situation. Sometimes I find it hard to choose because there are many options. However, I usually buy only what I really need instead of buying expensive or unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and unclear sentences. For example, 'I brought a last day' should be 'I bought jeans recently'. Also, pronouns are confused ('he's' and 'her clothes'). Try to use correct grammar and clearer sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce your story.

例: No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. For example, I bought a pair of jeans recently from a good shopping mall, but the jeans my friend bought, which were cheaper, looked better than mine.

× I don't get much time for buy different things.

✓ I don't get much time to buy different things.

The verb 'get' followed by 'time' should be followed by 'to' plus the base form of the verb, not 'for' plus the base form. So, 'time to buy' is correct, not 'time for buy'.

× But whenever I get spare time or weekend day in my weekend days I usually go to shopping malls and buy my favorite things or the things that I need.

✓ But whenever I get spare time or on weekend days, I usually go to shopping malls and buy my favorite things or the things that I need.

The phrase 'or weekend day in my weekend days' is incorrect. It should be 'or on weekend days' to correctly use the preposition 'on' with days. Also, adding a comma improves clarity.

× Yes, of course I compared the prices when I shop because I think it is quite important for us to compare the prices.

✓ Yes, of course I compare the prices when I shop because I think it is quite important for us to compare the prices.

The question is about habitual action, so present tense 'compare' should be used instead of past tense 'compared'.

× Because if I go to 1 store and that store ask me to give a certain amount of money and that is quite as expensive.

✓ Because if I go to one store and that store asks me to pay a certain amount of money and that is quite expensive.

Use 'asks me to pay' instead of 'ask me to give'. Also, 'quite as expensive' is incorrect; 'quite expensive' is correct. '1' should be written as 'one' in formal speech.

× Because if I go to 1 store and that store ask me to give a certain amount of money and that is quite as expensive.

✓ Because if I go to one store and that store asks me to pay a certain amount of money and that is quite expensive.

The subject 'that store' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'asks' not 'ask'.

× On the same time if I go to other shop and ask for the same thing, they might ask me to give a little amount of money compared to that store.

✓ At the same time, if I go to another shop and ask for the same thing, they might ask me to pay a smaller amount of money compared to that store.

The correct phrase is 'at the same time', not 'on the same time'. Also, 'another shop' is better than 'other shop' here. 'Ask me to give' should be 'ask me to pay'. 'A little amount' is better as 'a smaller amount' in this context.

× I brought a last day, I brought a jeans from a very good shopping mall and on the next day I saw my friend, he's wearing the same clothes which was cheaper than mine but her clothes was better than mine.

✓ I bought jeans last day from a very good shopping mall and on the next day I saw my friend; he was wearing the same clothes which were cheaper than mine but his clothes were better than mine.

'Brought' is incorrect; 'bought' is the correct past tense of 'buy'. 'A jeans' is incorrect; 'jeans' is plural or uncountable and does not take 'a'. 'He's' should be 'he was' for past tense consistency. 'Which was' should be 'which were' to agree with plural 'clothes'. 'Her clothes' should be 'his clothes' to match 'my friend'. 'Was' should be 'were' for plural 'clothes'.

× I brought a last day, I brought a jeans from a very good shopping mall and on the next day I saw my friend, he's wearing the same clothes which was cheaper than mine but her clothes was better than mine.

✓ I bought jeans last day from a very good shopping mall and on the next day I saw my friend; he was wearing the same clothes which were cheaper than mine but his clothes were better than mine.

The past tense of 'buy' is 'bought', not 'brought'. Also, maintain past tense consistently throughout the sentence.