Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'check out on new products on train'. Also, ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping in my free time because I like discovering new products. Additionally, I often go shopping with my friends, which makes it a social activity and a great way to spend time together.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid repetitive phrases like 'always every time'. Be specific about where and how you compare prices.

例: Yes, I always compare prices, especially online using apps or websites, because prices often vary. Moreover, my parents taught me to do this to help save money.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Be more specific about why making choices is difficult and how you handle it.

例: Yes, I find it hard to make choices when shopping because there are plenty of options. Therefore, I sometimes worry about picking the wrong one and need to spend extra time deciding.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Use linking words to explain your opinion logically. Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your examples.

例: To be honest, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. For example, sometimes the price reflects the brand or the materials used, but that doesn't always mean the product is of higher quality.

× Yes, I really enjoy shopping in my free time because I like to check out on new products on train.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy shopping in my free time because I like to check out new products on the train.

The phrase 'check out on' is incorrect; the correct form is 'check out' without 'on'. Also, 'on train' should be 'on the train' to specify the location properly.

× I often go to my friends and make it a social activities.

✓ I often go to my friends and make it a social activity.

The word 'activities' is plural but should be singular 'activity' to agree with 'it', which is singular.

× Yes, I always compare price especially online on apps or website because always every time the price are different and can be very early.

✓ Yes, I always compare prices especially online on apps or websites because every time the prices are different and can be very early.

The word 'price' should be plural 'prices' to match the context. Also, 'website' should be plural 'websites' to be consistent with 'apps'. 'Price are' should be 'prices are' for subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I always compare price especially online on apps or website because always every time the price are different and can be very early.

✓ Yes, I always compare prices especially online on apps or websites because every time the prices are different and can be very early.

The phrase 'always every time' is redundant and awkward; 'every time' alone is sufficient and correctly placed.

× My parents taught me to do it because I need to save money.

✓ My parents taught me to do it because I need to save money.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the context; no correction needed.

× Yes, I find it hard to make choice.

✓ Yes, I find it hard to make choices.

The word 'choice' should be plural 'choices' to match the context of difficulty in making decisions.

× When I go to the shopping there are plenty option, so sometimes I worry about the picking the wrong 1.

✓ When I go shopping there are plenty of options, so sometimes I worry about picking the wrong one.

'Go to the shopping' should be 'go shopping'. 'Plenty option' should be 'plenty of options' for correct plural and preposition use. 'The picking' should be 'picking' without 'the'. 'Wrong 1' should be 'wrong one'.

× So I need to spend time to figure out option.

✓ So I need to spend time to figure out options.

'Option' should be plural 'options' to match the context of multiple choices.

× To be honest, I don't think the expensive product always is better than the cheaper one.

✓ To be honest, I don't think the expensive product is always better than the cheaper one.

The adverb 'always' should be placed after the verb 'is' for correct word order. Also, 'product' and 'one' are correctly singular here.

× For example, sometimes the price is really reflective the brand or the material used, so that's why exactly no need to.

✓ For example, sometimes the price really reflects the brand or the material used, so that's exactly why there is no need to.

'Price is really reflective the brand' is incorrect; it should be 'price really reflects the brand'. Also, 'that's why exactly no need to' is incomplete and ungrammatical; it should be 'that's exactly why there is no need to'.