Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words and redundancy. Also, use correct grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially for clothes. I like wearing new outfits because it makes me feel confident and fresh. Whenever I have the chance, I go shopping to update my wardrobe.

提案: Focus on organizing your answer logically and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear reasons for your choices. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary related to shopping.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices before buying. However, if I find a product attractive and of good quality, I don't mind paying a higher price because I value its features and design.

提案: Improve your answer by using clearer sentence structures and more appropriate vocabulary. Replace informal or incorrect phrases with suitable expressions, and explain your reasons with linking words.

例: Yes, I often find it hard to decide what to buy. Therefore, I usually shop with my family or friends who help me choose items that suit me well.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid vague phrases and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: I believe expensive products are usually more durable than cheaper ones. For example, a high-quality jacket may last several years, while a cheaper one might wear out quickly, so investing in expensive items can bring more satisfaction.

× Like I like to wear a new clothes every day because wearing the same clothes make me feel so awkward.

✓ Like I like to wear new clothes every day because wearing the same clothes makes me feel so awkward.

The word 'clothes' is plural, so 'a new clothes' is incorrect; it should be 'new clothes' without 'a'. Also, the verb should agree with the plural subject 'clothes', so 'make' should be 'makes'.

× And yeah, I really like to do shopping whenever the topic is about clothes.

✓ And yeah, I really like shopping whenever the topic is about clothes.

The phrase 'do shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is simply 'like shopping'. Using 'do' with 'shopping' is unnecessary and ungrammatical.

× Yeah, I compare the price about the goods, but even though it is very expensive, I just take it because it's my choice.

✓ Yeah, I compare the prices of the goods, but even though they are very expensive, I just take them because it's my choice.

'Price' should be plural 'prices' when comparing multiple items. 'Goods' is plural, so pronouns and verbs referring to it should also be plural ('they are', 'them'). Also, 'compare the price about the goods' is incorrect; it should be 'compare the prices of the goods'.

× Like whenever, whenever I think the price is pretty expensive and the goods is very attractive.

✓ Like whenever I think the price is pretty expensive and the goods are very attractive.

The verb 'is' should agree with the plural noun 'goods', so it should be 'are'. Also, the repeated 'whenever' is redundant and should be used only once.

× I just want that attract attractive goods with me and yeah.

✓ I just want to take those attractive goods with me and yeah.

The phrase 'want that attract attractive goods' is ungrammatical. It should be 'want to take those attractive goods'. 'That' is incorrect here; 'those' is appropriate for plural 'goods'.

× So whenever I go with shop, I just take my mother, father or even my friends to choose goods for me.

✓ So whenever I go shopping, I just take my mother, father, or even my friends to choose goods for me.

The phrase 'go with shop' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping'. Also, a comma is needed before 'or' in a list.

× Yeah, in my context expensive thing is long lasting compared to cheaper one because when you bought a cheaper thing you just fulfill your wish but you didn't get a satisfaction from that.

✓ Yeah, in my context, expensive things are long lasting compared to cheaper ones because when you buy a cheaper thing you just fulfill your wish but you don't get satisfaction from that.

'Expensive thing' and 'cheaper one' should be plural to match the general statement: 'expensive things' and 'cheaper ones'. Also, tense consistency requires 'buy' instead of 'bought' and 'don't get' instead of 'didn't get'.

× So expensive things makes you satisfaction because it is so long.

✓ So expensive things give you satisfaction because they last long.

'Makes you satisfaction' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'give you satisfaction'. Also, 'it is so long' is unclear; 'they last long' is more appropriate for things lasting a long time.