Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer starts well with a clear opinion, but it becomes unclear and repetitive towards the end. Try to keep your sentences concise and avoid hesitation or repeated words. Also, make sure your answer is complete and coherent within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping because it allows me to discover new products and trends. I often go with friends, which makes it a fun social activity. Shopping together helps us share opinions and enjoy our time.

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear, but it could be improved by organizing your ideas more logically and using linking words. Also, try to avoid vague phrases like 'use apps to the best stores or deals' and be more specific.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to save money. For example, I use shopping apps to find the best deals at different stores. This habit was taught to me by my parents, and it helps me shop smartly.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains hesitation and unclear parts. Try to give a direct answer first, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences.

例: No, it's not difficult for me to make choices when I shop because I usually know what I need beforehand. For instance, I make a shopping list to stay focused and avoid buying unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and correcting grammar errors. Also, provide a specific example to support your opinion.

例: I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because sometimes you pay more for the brand name. For example, I bought a budget smartphone that works just as well as a more expensive model.

× I often go with friends turning it into a social activities so I I I chair. No, no, it's.

✓ I often go with friends, turning it into a social activity.

The phrase 'a social activities' is incorrect because 'activities' is plural but preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct form is 'a social activity' to match singular usage. Also, the original sentence contains repeated words and incomplete phrases which have been removed for clarity.

× I usually find the best prices or use apps to the best stores or deals.

✓ I usually find the best prices or use apps to find the best stores or deals.

The phrase 'use apps to the best stores or deals' is missing the verb 'find' after 'to'. The correct prepositional phrase is 'use apps to find the best stores or deals' to indicate the purpose of using apps.

× There are much cheaper product that works as well.

✓ There are much cheaper products that work as well.

'Product' should be plural 'products' to agree with 'are' and 'much' should be 'many' when referring to countable nouns. Also, 'works' should be 'work' to agree with the plural subject 'products'.