Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, "and I'm and I like" is repetitive and incorrect. Also, try to keep your answer concise within 5 sentences and use linking words to make it more coherent.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping, especially when I have extra money. I usually buy beautiful clothes because it has become a habit for me. Shopping makes me feel happy and relaxed, and I like exploring new styles and trends.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes such as "to make I don't overspend" which should be corrected. Also, try to use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Personally, I usually prioritise quality over quantity because I believe good products last longer. However, when I am shopping on a tight budget, I compare prices carefully so that I don't overspend. For example, if I find two similar items, I choose the one that offers better value for money without compromising quality.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and provide supporting details with linking words to make your answer coherent and informative.

例: As I'm a really choosy person, it is very difficult for me to choose the best item. Whenever I go shopping, I spend a lot of time comparing different products to make sure I pick the right one.

提案: Your answer has good content but is incomplete and has some grammatical mistakes like "from the for many years". Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to contrast ideas clearly.

例: In my opinion, expensive products are often made from high-quality fabric, which means they usually last longer and offer better durability. For example, a costly jacket made from premium fabric can keep you warm for many years, while a cheaper one might wear out quickly. However, it is not always the case because some affordable products also have good quality.

× Shopping makes me feel happy and relaxed and I'm and I like exploring new styles and trends.

✓ Shopping makes me feel happy and relaxed, and I like exploring new styles and trends.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'and I'm and I' which is incorrect. Removing the extra 'and I'm' corrects the sentence structure and maintains the present participle form 'exploring' correctly.

× Personally, I usually prioritise quality over quantity because I believe good products are last longer.

✓ Personally, I usually prioritise quality over quantity because I believe good products last longer.

The verb 'are' is incorrectly used with 'last longer'. The correct verb is 'last' without 'are' because 'last' is a verb here, not an adjective. This fixes the singular/plural verb agreement issue.

× However, when I am shopping on tight budget, I do compare prices carefully to make I don't overspend.

✓ However, when I am shopping on a tight budget, I do compare prices carefully to make sure I don't overspend.

The phrase 'on tight budget' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'to make I don't overspend' is incorrect; it should be 'to make sure I don't overspend' to correctly express the purpose.

× For example, if I find 2 similar items, I choose the one that offers better value for money without compromising.

✓ For example, if I find two similar items, I choose the one that offers better value for money without compromising.

Using the numeral '2' in formal speech should be replaced with the word 'two' for correctness and formality.

× As I'm a really choosy person, it is very difficult me to choose the best one.

✓ As I'm a really choosy person, it is very difficult for me to choose the best one.

The phrase 'difficult me' is missing the preposition 'for' which is necessary to link 'difficult' with the person affected.

× Whenever I go for shopping I.

✓ Whenever I go shopping, I find it hard to decide.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object. Adding a complete clause corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× For example, a costly jacket made from premium fabric can keep you warm from the for many years, while a cheaper one might wear out quickly.

✓ For example, a costly jacket made from premium fabric can keep you warm for many years, while a cheaper one might wear out quickly.

The phrase 'keep you warm from the for many years' contains an incorrect preposition 'from the'. Removing 'from the' corrects the prepositional phrase to 'for many years'.

× However, it is not always the case as some affordable products also.

✓ However, it is not always the case, as some affordable products also last long.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb phrase after 'also'. Adding 'last long' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.