Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「I can get the new one」は不自然で、「I can buy new things」などの表現が適切です。また、繰り返しや不明瞭な部分を避け、より明確で簡潔な文を心がけましょう。

例: Yes, I like shopping because I enjoy buying new clothes. It makes me happy to wear something fresh and stylish.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法や語彙の誤りがあり、意味が少し分かりにくいです。例えば、「important problem for young people」は不自然で、「important to find affordable prices」などの表現が適切です。より明確で簡潔な表現を使い、論理的なつながりを意識しましょう。

例: Yes, I always compare prices because it's important for young people like me to find good quality products at affordable prices.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや意味の不明瞭な部分があります。例えば、「I am sore」は不適切で、「I am indecisive」などの表現が良いでしょう。また、例の説明も明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

例: Yes, I find it difficult to make choices because I am indecisive. For example, when I go shopping for clothes, I often spend a long time deciding which ones to buy.

提案: 回答は意味が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。意見を明確に述べ、理由や具体例を付け加えると良いでしょう。また、文の構造を整理し、論理的に話を展開することが重要です。

例: I think expensive products are often better in quality, but cheaper products can also be good. Young people usually look for affordable options because they have limited budgets.

× Yes, I like shopping because I can get the new one.

✓ Yes, I like shopping because I can get new things.

The phrase 'the new one' incorrectly uses a singular noun when referring to items in general. Since shopping usually involves multiple items, the plural form 'new things' is more appropriate.

× I I'm so looking for wearing it.

✓ I am really looking forward to wearing it.

The phrase 'looking for wearing it' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'looking forward to wearing it,' where 'looking forward to' is followed by a gerund (-ing form). Also, 'so' should be replaced with 'really' for natural emphasis.

× it is important problem for young people to buy something as new as a cheap prices, so it is very helpful for me.

✓ it is an important problem for young people to buy something new at cheap prices, so it is very helpful for me.

The phrase 'important problem' needs the article 'an' before it. 'As new as a cheap prices' is incorrect; it should be 'something new at cheap prices.' Also, 'prices' is plural, so 'a' should be removed.

× I am sore.

✓ I am sorry.

The word 'sore' means painful or aching, which is incorrect here. The intended word is 'sorry,' which expresses regret or apology.

× It's takes me so long time to choose something.

✓ It takes me a long time to choose something.

The phrase 'It's takes' is incorrect; it should be 'It takes.' Also, 'so long time' is unnatural; the correct phrase is 'a long time.'

× For example when I go to the shop closing shop I always wondering which clothes.

✓ For example, when I go to the closing shop, I am always wondering which clothes to buy.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and structure. 'Closing shop' should be 'closing shop' with an article. 'I always wondering' should be 'I am always wondering.' Also, the sentence needs 'to buy' to complete the thought.

× I think sometimes, most of the time the expensive products are always better than cheapest ones, but for young people it is.

✓ I think sometimes, most of the time the expensive products are better than the cheapest ones, but for young people it is different.

The phrase 'cheapest ones' needs the definite article 'the.' The phrase 'it is' is incomplete and needs clarification, so 'different' is added to complete the thought.

× They young people are good at searching the cheaper one, but they have no core.

✓ Young people are good at searching for cheaper products, but they have no care.

'They young people' is incorrect; it should be 'Young people.' 'Searching the cheaper one' is incorrect; it should be 'searching for cheaper products.' 'No core' is likely a typo for 'no care.'