Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh dùng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "Uh" và chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "meets" nên là "meet" để phù hợp với chủ ngữ số nhiều). Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I love shopping because I find it relaxing and entertaining. I especially enjoy wandering around shopping malls, looking for products that catch my eye and meet my needs. Moreover, it's a great way to unwind and let my hair down after a busy day.

提案: Bạn trả lời rõ ràng và có ví dụ minh họa, tuy nhiên cần chú ý ngữ pháp như "friends advice" nên là "friends' advice" và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Bạn cũng nên tránh lặp từ như "so that" hai lần trong câu.

例: Yes, definitely. Comparing prices helps me find the best deals and save money. For instance, when I shop for clothes, I usually check online reviews and follow my friends' advice to manage my budget effectively and avoid buying unnecessary items.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý rõ ràng nhưng cấu trúc câu hơi dài và lặp lại, bạn nên chia câu ngắn hơn và tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "umm". Ngoài ra, chú ý ngữ pháp như "friends advice" nên là "friends' advice" và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc.

例: Not really. I find it easy to make decisions while shopping because I always check reviews and follow my friends' advice beforehand. This way, when I go to the mall, I can quickly find and buy what I need.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "I want bought" nên là "I once bought", "it's life expectancy what's like very good then" nên được diễn đạt lại cho đúng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và dùng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh dùng từ không chính xác.

例: Yes, I think expensive products are often better. For example, I once bought an expensive laptop and realized that its lifespan was much longer than that of a cheaper one.

× Especially I like wandering around the shopping mall purchasing the products that catch my eyes and meets my needs.

✓ Especially I like wandering around the shopping mall purchasing the products that catch my eye and meet my needs.

The phrase 'catch my eyes' should be 'catch my eye' because 'eye' is singular when referring to the expression meaning something attracts attention. Also, 'meets my needs' should be 'meet my needs' because the plural subject 'products' requires the plural verb form 'meet'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× I usually check online reviews and follow my friends advice so that I can manage the budgets effectively and avoid purchasing unnecessary items.

✓ I usually check online reviews and follow my friends' advice so that I can manage the budget effectively and avoid purchasing unnecessary items.

The phrase 'friends advice' is missing the possessive apostrophe; it should be 'friends' advice' to indicate advice belonging to friends. Also, 'budgets' should be singular 'budget' because it refers to the overall amount of money managed. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and quantifiers issue.

× Not really, I find it quite easy to make the decision while shopping because before shopping I always check all my reviews and follow my friends advice so that when I go to the shopping mall and purchase something umm I can get it easily to go home.

✓ Not really, I find it quite easy to make decisions while shopping because before shopping I always check all my reviews and follow my friends' advice so that when I go to the shopping mall and purchase something, I can easily take it home.

The phrase 'make the decision' should be 'make decisions' to generalize the action. 'Friends advice' needs the possessive apostrophe to be 'friends' advice'. Also, 'get it easily to go home' is awkward; 'easily take it home' is clearer. These are incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure issues.

× Yes, for instance, I want bought an expensive laptop and I realized that it's life expectancy what's like very good then a laptop that is cheaper.

✓ Yes, for instance, I once bought an expensive laptop and I realized that its life expectancy is much better than a laptop that is cheaper.

The phrase 'I want bought' is incorrect; it should be 'I once bought' to indicate past action. 'It's life expectancy what's like very good then' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it should be 'its life expectancy is much better than'. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue.