Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang natural dan agak bertele-tele. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung ke inti, hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'very, very, very'.

例: I don't go shopping often, but I enjoy it when I buy something as a reward for myself because it feels satisfying.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang lengkap dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Usahakan menjawab dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta gunakan linking words untuk memperjelas alasan Anda.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to get the best value for my money, especially when buying daily necessities.

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, tapi kalimatnya agak canggung dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih natural dan perhatikan struktur kalimat.

例: Sometimes it's difficult to choose the right product, like when I look for the best shampoo, I compare all the options available in the store.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada pengulangan serta penggunaan kata yang tidak tepat. Cobalah untuk menyampaikan pendapat dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan teratur.

例: Not always. I have found that cheaper products can sometimes be better in quality because expensive brands often rely on their reputation rather than the actual product.

× Actually, I'm not often going shopping, but when it comes to shopping for a reward for myself, I think it's quite fun actually, and it somehow goes very, very, very good.

✓ Actually, I don't often go shopping, but when it comes to shopping for a reward for myself, I think it's quite fun actually, and it somehow goes very, very, very well.

The phrase 'I'm not often going shopping' is incorrect because the verb 'go' should be in the base form after 'do not' for habitual actions. Also, 'goes very good' is incorrect; the adverb 'well' should be used instead of the adjective 'good' to modify the verb 'goes'. Kalimat 'I'm not often going shopping' salah karena kata kerja 'go' harus dalam bentuk dasar setelah 'do not' untuk tindakan kebiasaan. Selain itu, 'goes very good' salah; kata keterangan 'well' harus digunakan menggantikan kata sifat 'good' untuk memodifikasi kata kerja 'goes'.

× When I'm going to when I go shopping, I'm looking for a value for money that I'm going to spend.

✓ When I go shopping, I'm looking for value for money that I'm going to spend.

The phrase 'When I'm going to when I go shopping' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'When I go shopping' to indicate habitual action. Also, 'a value for money' is incorrect; 'value for money' is an uncountable noun phrase and does not need an article. Frasa 'When I'm going to when I go shopping' berlebihan dan salah. Bentuk yang benar adalah 'When I go shopping' untuk menunjukkan tindakan kebiasaan. Selain itu, 'a value for money' salah; 'value for money' adalah frasa kata benda tak terhitung dan tidak memerlukan artikel.

× So I did compare every time I go shopping, but somehow when it comes to shopping for daily needs it.

✓ So I do compare every time I go shopping, but somehow when it comes to shopping for daily needs, it is different.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'I did compare' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so 'I do compare' is better. The sentence ends abruptly with 'it' without completing the thought; adding 'it is different' or similar completes the sentence. Kalimat ini tidak lengkap dan canggung. 'I did compare' adalah bentuk lampau tetapi konteks menunjukkan tindakan kebiasaan, jadi 'I do compare' lebih tepat. Kalimat berakhir tiba-tiba dengan 'it' tanpa menyelesaikan pemikiran; menambahkan 'it is different' atau yang serupa melengkapi kalimat.

× Sometimes it's hard to choose to do something for us when we are going to shop.

✓ Sometimes it's hard to choose something for us when we go shopping.

The phrase 'choose to do something for us' is awkward and unclear. The correct expression is 'choose something' when referring to selecting items. Also, 'when we are going to shop' is better expressed as 'when we go shopping' for habitual actions. Frasa 'choose to do something for us' canggung dan tidak jelas. Ungkapan yang benar adalah 'choose something' saat merujuk pada memilih barang. Selain itu, 'when we are going to shop' lebih baik diungkapkan sebagai 'when we go shopping' untuk tindakan kebiasaan.

× For example, when we are trying to find a best shampoo for us, we try to compare everything available at store.

✓ For example, when we are trying to find the best shampoo for us, we try to compare everything available at the store.

The phrase 'a best shampoo' is incorrect because 'best' is a superlative adjective and requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'at store' needs the definite article 'the' to be grammatically correct. Frasa 'a best shampoo' salah karena 'best' adalah kata sifat superlatif dan memerlukan artikel tertentu 'the'. Selain itu, 'at store' memerlukan artikel tertentu 'the' agar benar secara tata bahasa.

× Not really actually. I often found that the cheaper products have better qualities, uh, rather than the expensive one.

✓ Not really actually. I often find that the cheaper products have better qualities, uh, rather than the expensive ones.

The verb 'found' is past tense but the context suggests present habitual action, so 'find' is correct. Also, 'the expensive one' should be plural 'the expensive ones' to agree with 'products'. Kata kerja 'found' adalah bentuk lampau tetapi konteks menunjukkan tindakan kebiasaan sekarang, jadi 'find' yang benar. Selain itu, 'the expensive one' harus jamak 'the expensive ones' agar sesuai dengan 'products'.

× Because sometimes the brand is oversell or an over hype so it sells the brand so it sells the things. Umm, expense. More expense.

✓ Because sometimes the brand is oversold or overhyped, so it sells the brand rather than the product. Umm, expensive. More expensive.

The words 'oversell' and 'over hype' are incorrect forms; the correct past participles are 'oversold' and 'overhyped'. Also, 'expense' should be the adjective 'expensive' to describe products. Kata 'oversell' dan 'over hype' adalah bentuk yang salah; bentuk past participle yang benar adalah 'oversold' dan 'overhyped'. Selain itu, 'expense' harus berupa kata sifat 'expensive' untuk mendeskripsikan produk.