Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น ใช้ 'because' อย่างเหมาะสม และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'shopping' ซ้ำหลายครั้งในประโยคเดียว

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially online because it is very convenient nowadays. You can easily find anything you want and often get the best discounts.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคสมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนและครบถ้วน

例: Yes, I always compare prices because the same product can have different prices on different websites. Also, some websites offer coupons or discounts for first-time buyers, which helps me save money.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคสมบูรณ์และลื่นไหลมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้ 'because' และ 'so' อย่างเหมาะสม

例: Not really, because I usually have a clear idea of what I want to buy, so it is quite easy to make a choice.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างชัดเจน และให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: Not really. Sometimes expensive products are costly because of their brand value, but cheaper products can be made in the same factory without the brand name, so their quality can be similar.

× shopping is one of the guilty pleasure for me

✓ shopping is one of the guilty pleasures for me

The phrase 'one of the' requires a plural noun following it. 'Pleasure' should be pluralized to 'pleasures' to be grammatically correct.

× I prefer to shopping online

✓ I prefer shopping online

The verb 'prefer' is followed directly by the gerund form without 'to'. Using 'to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer shopping'.

× because nowadays is really easy to shopping where the Internet you can choose anything you like with the most discount on the.

✓ because nowadays it is really easy to shop online where you can choose anything you like with the most discounts.

The sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. 'Nowadays is' lacks a subject; 'to shopping' should be 'to shop'; 'where the Internet' is awkward and should be 'online'; 'with the most discount on the' is incomplete and should be 'with the most discounts.' The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.

× in the website something exactly the same, but the price is not the same.

✓ on the website something exactly the same, but the price is not the same.

The correct preposition for websites is 'on' not 'in'. 'On the website' is the proper phrase.

× So I usually find the best deal possible in each website.

✓ So I usually find the best deal possible on each website.

The preposition with 'website' should be 'on' not 'in'. Also, 'each website' is correct but 'on each website' is the proper phrase.

× Some website offer you the coupon or the first time buying and if you save you.

✓ Some websites offer you coupons or discounts for first-time buying, and you can save money.

'Website' should be plural 'websites' to match 'some'. 'Coupon' should be plural 'coupons' to match 'some websites'. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; it is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× when I want to shopping I have something in my mind that I want to buy

✓ when I want to shop I have something in my mind that I want to buy

The verb 'want to' should be followed by the base form 'shop', not 'shopping'. 'Want to shopping' is incorrect.

× so it's quite easy to buy something that you already wanted.

✓ so it's quite easy to buy something that I already want.

The pronoun 'you' is inconsistent with the speaker's perspective; it should be 'I'. Also, 'wanted' should be present tense 'want' to match the context.

× Sometime the expensive thing is because they value their branding

✓ Sometimes expensive things are because they value their branding

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match 'they'. Also, 'are' is needed for plural subject.

× but sometimes the cheaper one is made from the same factory but they don't have the branding.

✓ but sometimes the cheaper ones are made in the same factory but they don't have the branding.

'One' is singular but 'they' is plural; to be consistent, use plural 'ones' and 'are'. Also, 'made from' should be 'made in' for factories.

× the price will be cheaper but the credit is exactly.

✓ the price will be cheaper but the quality is exactly the same.

The word 'credit' is incorrect here; likely 'quality' is intended. Also, the sentence is incomplete; 'exactly' should be followed by 'the same' to complete the comparison.