Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it allows me to buy clothes and other items I need. I usually go with my friends, who often give me useful advice.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý. Hãy tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because some items in supermarkets are expensive. Comparing helps me find cheaper options in other stores.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh" và cố gắng sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: Yes, sometimes it's hard to choose because I have to decide between ice cream and sushi when I don't have enough money to buy both.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi và trình bày ý rõ ràng, có liên kết logic giữa các câu.

例: I don't think expensive products are always better. Sometimes cheaper items have good quality, so it's important to focus on quality rather than price.

× Shopping helps me to buy anything else that I love or I need it like clothes, beautiful dress and shopping.

✓ Shopping helps me to buy anything else that I love or need, like clothes and beautiful dresses.

The phrase 'I need it' is incorrect because 'need' should not be followed by 'it' here; also, 'beautiful dress' should be plural 'beautiful dresses' to match the context. The verb 'helps me to buy' is correct, but the sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary pronouns and correcting plural forms.

× Usually I go with my parents and my friends, especially friends because when I'm going with them they'll make many advance that useful for me.

✓ Usually I go with my parents and my friends, especially friends, because when I'm going with them they'll give me many useful advice.

The phrase 'make many advance' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'give many useful advice' or 'give me much useful advice'. Also, 'advice' is uncountable, so 'many' should be replaced with 'much' or rephrased. The verb 'going' is correctly used here as a present participle.

× Yes, I usually compare prices when I going shopping because sometimes when you go to a supermarket you buy a little things but that things are very expensive and you compare prices to another shops it says that it's cheaper than what you would good choice.

✓ Yes, I usually compare prices when I go shopping because sometimes when you go to a supermarket you buy a few things but those things are very expensive, and when you compare prices at other shops, you find that it's cheaper, so you can make a good choice.

The phrase 'I going shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'I go shopping' (present tense). 'A little things' is incorrect; 'a few things' is correct for countable nouns. 'That things' should be 'those things' (plural demonstrative pronoun). 'Compare prices to another shops' should be 'compare prices at other shops'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, sometimes it's very difficult for me to make many choices when I'm going shopping.

✓ Yes, sometimes it's very difficult for me to make many choices when I go shopping.

The phrase 'when I'm going shopping' is acceptable but 'when I go shopping' is more natural and consistent with habitual actions. The verb tense should be simple present for habitual actions.

× Firstly, uh, I usually make some choices between my ice cream and my sushi, which I would like to choose one for eating because sometimes I don't have much money to buy both of them.

✓ Firstly, uh, I usually make some choices between my ice cream and my sushi, and I would like to choose one to eat because sometimes I don't have enough money to buy both of them.

The phrase 'choose one for eating' is awkward; 'choose one to eat' is more natural. Also, 'much money' is correct for uncountable nouns, but 'enough money' fits better here. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I don't think so, although everyone says expensive projects are usually better than cheaper ones, but sometimes not.

✓ I don't think so. Although everyone says expensive products are usually better than cheaper ones, sometimes they are not.

The word 'projects' is incorrect; it should be 'products'. Also, the sentence is a run-on; splitting into two sentences improves clarity. The pronoun 'they' is added to refer to 'products'.

× The quality is more than important than quantity.

✓ Quality is more important than quantity.

The phrase 'more than important than' is incorrect; the correct comparative structure is 'more important than'. Also, 'the quality' and 'quantity' do not need 'the' here.

× So choosing things you just uh, ex take attention to quantity of it more than the quality.

✓ So when choosing things, you just take more notice of quantity than quality.

The phrase 'ex take attention to quantity of it' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'take more notice of quantity than quality'. Also, 'the quality' should be 'quality' without 'the' for general statements.