Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar mistakes, such as 'I always get overwhelmed' and 'I regret buying them'.

例: Yes, I like shopping, but I don't enjoy crowded malls because I often get overwhelmed and buy unnecessary items. Therefore, I prepare a list beforehand to avoid regret.

提案: Reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech clearer. Also, complete your sentences fully and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I enjoy finding bargains. However, I never compromise on quality; if two products have the same quality, I choose the cheaper one.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'but' and 'so' to make your answer coherent and clear.

例: It used to be difficult, but now I always make a list before shopping and stick to it, so I avoid buying unnecessary items.

提案: Try to avoid hesitation and filler words. Provide clear opinions with supporting reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Although I don't have specific examples, I believe that high-quality products usually cost more because good materials and craftsmanship are expensive. Therefore, expensive products tend to be better than cheaper ones.

× I always got overwhelmed and sometimes I buy things which is not relevant or important for me and then I always regret to buying them.

✓ I always get overwhelmed and sometimes I buy things which are not relevant or important to me and then I always regret buying them.

The verb 'got' should be in the present tense 'get' to match the present context. 'Which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural noun 'things'. 'Regret to buying' is incorrect; the correct form is 'regret buying'.

× I always got overwhelmed and sometimes I buy things which is not relevant or important for me and then I always regret to buying them.

✓ I always get overwhelmed and sometimes I buy things which are not relevant or important to me and then I always regret buying them.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' when expressing relevance or importance to someone.

× Umm so I prepare.

✓ Umm, so I prepare.

A comma is needed after 'Umm' to separate the interjection from the main clause for better clarity.

× I have always list and I try to stick on my plan and not uh, over by uh, things which I don't really need.

✓ I always have a list and I try to stick to my plan and not overbuy things which I don't really need.

The phrase 'stick on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'stick to'. 'Over by' is incorrect; the correct word is 'overbuy'. Also, 'have always list' should be 'always have a list' for correct word order and article usage.

× I have always list and I try to stick on my plan and not uh, over by uh, things which I don't really need.

✓ I always have a list and I try to stick to my plan and not overbuy things which I don't really need.

The noun 'list' is singular and requires the article 'a' before it.

× I have always list and I try to stick on my plan and not uh, over by uh, things which I don't really need.

✓ I always have a list and I try to stick to my plan and not overbuy things which I don't really need.

The pronoun usage is correct here; no change needed.

× if you umm, produce a quality product, uh, it costs is umm, higher and umm, good quality product can't be cheap.

✓ If you produce a quality product, it costs more and a good quality product can't be cheap.

The phrase 'it costs is umm, higher' is incorrect; it should be 'it costs more'. Also, 'good quality product' should be preceded by the article 'a'.

× if you umm, produce a quality product, uh, it costs is umm, higher and umm, good quality product can't be cheap.

✓ If you produce a quality product, it costs more and a good quality product can't be cheap.

The noun phrase 'good quality product' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.