Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢购物的观点，但存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题。例如，“make me leave my mood”应为“lift my mood”。建议注意语法准确性，避免拼写错误，并使表达更自然流畅。

例: Definitely, I enjoy shopping because it lifts my mood and I feel satisfied when I buy things. For example, I usually spend quite a bit each month on new clothes, trying tasty foods, and buying makeup items.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词，导致表达不够连贯。建议使用连接词如“however”、“so”来使句子更流畅，同时注意单复数和冠词的使用。

例: Well, it depends. When I have enough budget each month, I don't compare prices because if I like something, I buy it to reward myself. However, if my budget is tight, I compare prices to find more affordable options.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复填充词，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免使用“umm”等填充词，并且注意语法正确性，使表达更自然。

例: Definitely, I find it hard to make shopping decisions on my own. Usually, I ask my friends or family to help me choose clothes or other items.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构混乱，缺少连接词，且有语法错误。建议使用连接词如“because”、“and”，并注意句子完整性和语法准确性。

例: Definitely not. Some expensive products have low quality because their high price is due to the influence of famous brands. Moreover, if you spend more time searching and comparing prices online, you can find cheaper alternatives.

× I enjoy shopping because it make me leave my mood and I feel satisfied when I buy things.

✓ I enjoy shopping because it makes me leave my mood and I feel satisfied when I buy things.

动词make的主语是第三人称单数it，动词应加-s变为makes，表示主谓一致。

× Like I usually spend a lot of money per month to buy some new clothes, try some tasty foods and makeup item.

✓ Like I usually spend a lot of money per month to buy some new clothes, try some tasty foods and makeup items.

makeup item应为复数makeup items，因为前面列举了多种物品，保持复数形式。

× Well it depends, when I have enough budget per month I wouldn't compare price because I just feel like if I like it then I buy it to reward myself but if I don't have enough budget I will compare price to make it more affordable to me.

✓ Well it depends, when I have enough budget per month I wouldn't compare prices because I just feel like if I like it then I buy it to reward myself but if I don't have enough budget I will compare prices to make it more affordable to me.

price应使用复数prices，因为比较的是多个商品的价格。

× I think I'm not a independent person with independent UMM thinking I usually umm need some friends or my family to and help me to choose clothes or something when I buy it, yes.

✓ I think I'm not an independent person with independent thinking. I usually need some friends or my family to help me choose clothes or something when I buy them, yes.

1. a independent应为an independent，冠词使用错误。2. 'to and help me'结构错误，应去掉and。3. 'choose clothes or something when I buy it'中it指代不明，改为them指代复数clothes。

× Definitely not even for some high price products can have very low quality their high price only because of their influence of famous bands.

✓ Definitely not. Even some high-priced products can have very low quality; their high price is only because of the influence of famous brands.

1. high price products应为复合形容词high-priced products。2. brands拼写错误。3. 句子结构调整使表达更清晰。

× And if you are willing to spend more time to find and compare the price in the online shop, you can find more cheaper one.

✓ And if you are willing to spend more time finding and comparing prices in online shops, you can find cheaper ones.

1. spend后应接动名词finding和comparing。2. price应为复数prices。3. in the online shop改为in online shops更自然。4. more cheaper是错误的比较级表达，应为cheaper。5. one改为复数ones，指代多个商品。