Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Nói câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và tiếng ừ/ừm, dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn (tối đa 3–4 câu). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về loại cửa hàng hoặc món đồ ưa thích để phong phú thông tin. Ví dụ: bắt đầu bằng “Yes, I enjoy shopping” rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để kết nối các ý.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially with my best friend or my mother. I like buying clothes and shoes because I enjoy updating my wardrobe. For example, last month we went to a local boutique and I bought a new pair of trainers that I wear every day.

提案: Cải thiện: Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ (ví dụ “I I”, “to to”). Nên giải thích cụ thể cách so sánh giá (so sánh giữa cửa hàng và trực tuyến, dùng ứng dụng hoặc mã giảm giá). Dùng liên từ như “so” và “for example” để làm rõ lý do và phương pháp.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because I have a limited budget. I check the price in the shop and then look online to see if it is cheaper. For example, I often use shopping apps to compare prices and find discount codes before I buy.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp ngắn gọn, tránh tiếng ngập ngừng và sửa lỗi diễn đạt (“see this seated” không rõ). Giải thích rõ phương pháp ra quyết định (ví dụ: xem đánh giá, thích thiết kế, giá cả phù hợp). Dùng liên từ như “because” và “so” để kết nối lý do.

例: Not at all. I usually decide quickly because I browse online and read reviews first. If I really like the design and the price is reasonable, I buy it straight away. This helps me avoid spending too much time choosing.

提案: Cải thiện: Trình bày ý kiến rõ ràng và đưa ví dụ cụ thể để minh họa. Tránh cấu trúc lặp lặp và lỗi ngữ pháp (“is have”, “just make the just make”). Nên nói “No, not always” rồi giải thích bằng lý do cụ thể (chất lượng, thương hiệu, nguồn gốc) và đưa ví dụ so sánh.

例: No, not always. Expensive products can be better because of higher quality or brand reputation, but cheaper items can sometimes perform just as well. For example, I bought an inexpensive blender that works as well as an expensive one I tried at a friend’s house.

× I like to go shopping, uh, especially with my friends, my best friend or my mommy because, uh, I love to have the new clothes or new shoe in my, in my collection.

✓ I like to go shopping, especially with my friends, my best friend, or my mom because I love to have new clothes or new shoes in my collection.

Student used 'the' incorrectly before 'new clothes' and 'new shoe' and used 'mommy' which is informal; also 'new shoe' should be plural 'new shoes' to match 'clothes'. In English, general nouns like 'new clothes' do not need the definite article 'the'. Use 'my mom' for neutral tone and ensure plural agreement for countable nouns. Suggestion: Omit 'the' for general items, use correct plural forms, and use 'mom' instead of 'mommy' in formal responses.

× That's why I like to shop, go out to shopping.

✓ That's why I like to go shopping.

Redundant and ungrammatical phrase 'go out to shopping' should be 'go shopping' or 'go out shopping'. Keep the verb pattern 'go shopping'. Suggestion: Use 'go shopping' or 'go out shopping' but not both together.

× Yes, I usually come back the price when I go shopping because I I don't have too much money to to buy something.

✓ Yes, I usually check the prices when I go shopping because I don't have much money to buy things.

'Come back the price' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'check' or 'compare'. 'Too much money' is acceptable but 'much money' fits negative context better; 'to to' is repetition and 'something' should be plural 'things'. Suggestion: Use 'check the prices' or 'compare prices', avoid repeated words, and use 'much' with uncountable nouns in negatives.

× That's why I go to the shop and see the price in the shop and go online to see the price and.

✓ That's why I go to the shop to check the price and also go online to compare prices.

Repeating 'see the price in the shop' is awkward; use 'check the price' or 'compare prices'. 'And' at the end is incomplete. Use parallel structure 'to check ... and to compare ...'. Suggestion: Use concise verbs like 'check' and 'compare' and complete the sentence.

× Definitely no, because I choose, uh, see this seated, uh, item in the in online and I'm sure that, uh, I love this item and I should buy this and this is not difficult for me to make choice when I go shopping.

✓ Definitely not, because I look at items online and if I like something I'm sure I will buy it, so it's not difficult for me to make choices when I go shopping.

Use 'definitely not' instead of 'definitely no' for answering 'Is it difficult?'. 'Choose, see this seated' is unclear; use 'look at items online'. 'In the in online' is incorrect preposition use; correct is 'online'. 'I should buy this and this' is awkward; use 'I will buy it'. 'Make choice' should be 'make choices'. Suggestion: Use appropriate negation 'definitely not', clean up redundant fillers, use 'online' without preposition, and use plural 'choices'.

× Umm no because sometime expensive product is have the good experience with everyone but sometimes the cheaper ones is the same.

✓ No, because sometimes an expensive product has a good reputation with everyone, but sometimes the cheaper ones are just as good.

Problems: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'expensive product' as singular needs an article 'an'; 'is have' is ungrammatical—use 'has'; 'the good experience with everyone' is awkward—'a good reputation' fits; 'cheaper ones is' should be 'cheaper ones are' (plural agreement) and 'the same' is vague—use 'just as good'. Suggestion: Check singular/plural agreement, use correct verb forms, and choose precise nouns like 'reputation'.

× This because some shop is just should make just make the just make the price higher.

✓ This is because some shops intentionally set their prices higher.

Missing verb 'is' after 'This'. 'Some shop' should be plural 'some shops'. The phrase 'is just should make just make the just make the price higher' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'intentionally set their prices higher' or 'just raise their prices'. Suggestion: Use 'This is because' to start explanation, ensure noun-verb agreement, and avoid repetition by choosing a single clear verb like 'set' or 'raise'.