Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid repetition and minor errors to make your answer sound more natural. Also, use clearer linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating "currently," say "At the moment, I am a student..." and replace "closely aliens" with "closely aligns."

예시: At the moment, I am a student studying Supply Chain Management at Sibiu University because this field closely aligns with my previous work experience. I believe it will broaden my future career opportunities, and I particularly enjoy learning about logistics.

제안: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Avoid incomplete thoughts like "I really enjoyed the challenge of meeting." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Although I am currently pursuing my degree, I have almost 20 years of work experience in sales. I used to work at China's largest terminal manufacturing company, where I was responsible for regional sales and management. I really enjoyed the challenge of meeting sales targets and managing client relationships.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and add linking words to enhance coherence.

예시: Yes, it's definitely a good place to work. The environment is very friendly and supportive, which keeps everyone motivated and makes teamwork easier. Moreover, the company offers excellent opportunities for professional growth, such as training programs and mentorship, making it a very attractive workplace.

제안: Your answer is good but could be improved by correcting minor errors and using more precise vocabulary. For example, "employees personalities" should be "employees' personal needs." Also, use linking words to connect your points.

예시: Yes, I absolutely love the place where I work. The company not only supports my career development but also takes care of employees' personal needs. For instance, they provide daycare for our children and offer delicious meals for everyone. Additionally, in the summer, they even hand out ice cream to all employees.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-organized. To improve, try to use more specific linking words and slightly expand your supporting details for clarity.

예시: I hope to find a job in sales or supply chain management because I enjoy working with people and organizing projects. However, if better opportunities arise or my interests change, I might consider switching careers. Ultimately, my future work plans will depend on the circumstances and available options.

× I'm current I'm currently a student studying supply chain Management at Sibiu University.

✓ I'm currently a student studying supply chain management at Sibiu University.

The sentence contains a repetition error ('I'm current I'm currently'). Removing the redundant phrase corrects the sentence. Also, 'Management' should not be capitalized unless part of a proper noun.

× I choose this field because it closely aliens with my previous work experience and I believe it will broaden my future career opportunities.

✓ I chose this field because it closely aligns with my previous work experience and I believe it will broaden my future career opportunities.

The verb 'choose' should be in the past tense 'chose' to match the context. The word 'aliens' is incorrect; the correct word is 'aligns'. The preposition 'with' is correctly used after 'aligns'.

× I'm currently a student pursue my degree, but I have almost 20 years of work experience in sales.

✓ I'm currently a student pursuing my degree, but I have almost 20 years of work experience in sales.

The verb 'pursue' should be in the present participle form 'pursuing' to correctly follow the auxiliary verb 'am' in the present continuous tense.

× I used to work at China's largest terminal manufacturing company or where I was responsible for regional sales and management.

✓ I used to work at China's largest terminal manufacturing company where I was responsible for regional sales and management.

The word 'or' is incorrectly used here; it should be removed to maintain sentence clarity and correctness.

× I really enjoyed the challenge of meeting.

✓ I really enjoyed the challenge of meeting targets.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'meeting'. Adding a relevant object like 'targets' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× The environment is very friendly and supportive, which keeps everyone motivated and makes the team work easy.

✓ The environment is very friendly and supportive, which keeps everyone motivated and makes teamwork easy.

The phrase 'team work' should be one word 'teamwork'. Also, no article is needed before 'teamwork' in this context.

× The company also offers great opportunities for professional growth, like training programs and the mentorship, so it's really an attractive place to work.

✓ The company also offers great opportunities for professional growth, like training programs and mentorship, so it's really an attractive place to work.

The definite article 'the' before 'mentorship' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× Yes, I absolutely love the place where I work. The company not only supports my career needs, but it also takes care of employees personalities.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love the place where I work. The company not only supports my career needs, but it also takes care of employees' personalities.

The possessive form 'employees'' is needed to correctly indicate that the personalities belong to the employees.

× For instance, they provide daycare for our children and offer delicious meals for everyone.

✓ For instance, they provide daycare for our children and offer delicious meals to everyone.

The preposition 'to' is more appropriate than 'for' when referring to offering meals to people.

× Ultimately, my future work plans will depend on the circumstance.

✓ Ultimately, my future work plans will depend on the circumstances.

The noun 'circumstance' should be plural 'circumstances' to correctly express the general conditions affecting future plans.