Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答内容较完整，表达清晰，但句子较长且信息量大，建议简化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: I work as a finance lecturer at a local university. I teach undergraduate students and also conduct research on financial risk management and share repurchase.

제안: 回答中信息丰富，但部分表达不够自然，如“1/3 tier city”不太清晰，建议使用更常见的表达方式，并注意句子连贯性。

예시: I work at a small university in my hometown, which is in the southwest of Zhejiang province. The city is known for its digital commerce industry. If you have the chance, you should visit and enjoy the local hospitality.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然的问题，如“makes UMM research conducting”不正确，建议简化句子并使用正确的语法结构。

예시: Yes, it's a great place to work because the university is small but well equipped with advanced computers and technical devices. This helps us conduct research more efficiently and focus better.

제안: 回答表达了个人感受，但句子较长且结构复杂，建议分句表达，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: Actually, I don't really like working there. Some staff members in the administrative department are often rude to lecturers and professors, including me. This makes me feel disrespected.

제안: 回答清晰且内容完整，但句子稍显冗长，建议简化表达，使语言更自然流畅。

예시: In the future, I plan to finish my current job as a finance lecturer. Then, I want to study abroad to advance my career, possibly next year.

× I am currently working as a finance lecturer at a local university where I teach undergraduates and conduct some research related to financial risk management and the share repurchase.

✓ I am currently working as a finance lecturer at a local university where I teach undergraduates and conduct some research related to financial risk management and share repurchase.

“the share repurchase”中的“the”使用不当。这里“share repurchase”是一个概念或活动，不需要特指，因此不应使用定冠词“the”。建议去掉“the”。

× I work at a small university in my hometown which is located in the southwest of Zhejiang province UMM.

✓ I work at a small university in my hometown, UMM, which is located in the southwest of Zhejiang province.

句子结构不清晰，导致“UMM”的位置和修饰关系不明确。应将“UMM”用逗号隔开，作为同位语，明确说明“my hometown”是“UMM”，使句子更通顺。

× It is 1/3 tier city known for its digital commerce industry.

✓ It is a 3rd-tier city known for its digital commerce industry.

“1/3 tier city”表达不正确，且缺少冠词。应改为“a 3rd-tier city”，表示“一个三线城市”，符合英语表达习惯。

× If you have any chance, you are welcome to visit and experience people's hospitality.

✓ If you have a chance, you are welcome to visit and experience people's hospitality.

“have any chance”用法不当，通常应说“have a chance”，表示“有机会”。“any”多用于否定句或疑问句中。

× Of course, it's a great place to work because the university is very small but well equipped with those advanced computers and other technical devices, which makes UMM research conducting even more efficient and also help us focus on the research.

✓ Of course, it's a great place to work because the university is very small but well equipped with advanced computers and other technical devices, which makes conducting research at UMM even more efficient and also helps us focus on the research.

“those advanced computers”中“those”用法不当，建议去掉。短语“makes UMM research conducting”语序错误，应改为“makes conducting research at UMM”。“help”应与前面的“makes”保持一致，改为“helps”。

× Actually, I don't really like to work there because some staff members in the administrative department are always rude and mean to the lecturers and the professors including me with no reasons which make me feel disrespectful.

✓ Actually, I don't really like to work there because some staff members in the administrative department are always rude and mean to the lecturers and professors, including me, for no reason, which makes me feel disrespected.

“the lecturers and the professors”中定冠词多余，应去掉。短语“with no reasons”应改为“for no reason”。“which make me feel disrespectful”主谓不一致，应改为“which makes me feel disrespected”，且“disrespected”更符合表达被冒犯的意思。

× In the future, I plan to complete my current work as a finance lecturer, and then I will pursue a further education abroad to advance my career, possibly next year.

✓ In the future, I plan to complete my current work as a finance lecturer, and then I will pursue further education abroad to advance my career, possibly next year.

“a further education”中“education”是不可数名词，不应加冠词“a”。应改为“further education”。