Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“I'm working now”和“I work as...”，可以合并为一句更自然流畅的表达。同时，注意单复数一致，避免“these jobs”应为“this job”。

예시: I am currently working as a financial manager, and I really enjoy this job because it allows me to gain deep insights into the financial markets.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构不清晰，建议简化句子，注意主谓一致和介词使用，避免冗长重复。

예시: I work in downtown Guangzhou, which is very close to my home. Therefore, my commute is short and convenient.

제안: 回答中连接词使用重复（First, firstly），且句子结构混乱。建议使用恰当的连接词，简洁表达观点，注意语法和词汇搭配。

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work for several reasons. Firstly, it is very close to my house, so I don't spend much time commuting. Secondly, the office is comfortable, which helps me focus better on my tasks.

제안: 回答中表达不够完整，句子结尾不完整且有语法错误。建议完整表达观点，注意词汇搭配和句子完整性。

예시: Absolutely, I really like my workplace. It is comfortable and quiet, which helps me focus on my tasks. Additionally, the office has inclusive facilities such as a cafeteria.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，如“more professional exams”和“more earned certification”。建议简化表达，注意动词形式和词汇搭配。

예시: My future plan is to become a top financial manager. To achieve this, I intend to take more professional exams and earn additional certifications to improve my skills and qualifications.

× I'm working now and I work as a financial manager.

✓ I am working now and I work as a financial manager.

这里的"I'm working now"是正确的现在进行时，表示正在进行的动作；"I work as a financial manager"是一般现在时，表示职业状态。句子本身无语法错误，无需修改。

× I really enjoy these jobs because it allows me to get to know the financial markets deeply.

✓ I really enjoy this job because it allows me to get to know the financial markets deeply.

"these jobs"是复数，但后面用的是单数动词"allows"，主谓不一致。应将"these jobs"改为单数"this job"，保持主谓一致。

× I work in Guangzhou and my company base downtown and this place is really close my home so I commute just spend a really short time and it is really convenient places and because it's close the shop.

✓ I work in Guangzhou and my company is based downtown and this place is really close to my home so my commute only takes a short time and it is a really convenient place because it's close to the shops.

"my company base"缺少动词"is based"；"close my home"缺少介词"to"；"commute just spend"结构不正确，应改为"my commute only takes"；"convenient places"应为单数"convenient place"；"close the shop"缺少介词"to"且"shop"应为复数"shops"。

× Yes, it is a good place to work for several reasons. First, firstly it is really close to my house and I don't spend too much time on commuting and secondly it is there is a comfortable places I which can make me more easy to focus on my task.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work for several reasons. First, it is really close to my house and I don't spend too much time commuting, and secondly there are comfortable places which make it easier for me to focus on my tasks.

"it is there is a comfortable places"结构重复且"places"为复数，需用"there are"；"more easy"应改为"easier"；"focus on my task"应为复数"tasks"以匹配上下文。

× Absolutely, I really like this place where I work. The place is comfortable and quiet which can make me more easy to focus my task and at the same time the office has inclusive facility such as the cafeteria, the.

✓ Absolutely, I really like this place where I work. The place is comfortable and quiet, which makes it easier for me to focus on my tasks, and at the same time the office has inclusive facilities such as the cafeteria.

"more easy"应改为"easier"；"focus my task"应为"focus on my tasks"；"inclusive facility"应为复数"inclusive facilities"；句末"the."不完整，应去掉。

× My future work plans is to be a top financial manager. To achieve that I will plan to get more professional exams and to earn more earned certification to improve my quality to and qualification.

✓ My future work plans are to be a top financial manager. To achieve that, I plan to take more professional exams and earn more certifications to improve my quality and qualifications.

"plans is"主谓不一致，应为"plans are"；"will plan to get more professional exams"表达不自然，改为"plan to take more professional exams"；"more earned certification"结构错误，改为"earn more certifications"；"quality to and qualification"语序混乱，应为"quality and qualifications"。