Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and clarify terms (e.g., 'else exam' is unclear). Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I am currently a student. I just graduated from high school this year, and now I am preparing for an English exam to apply to university.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Focus on directly answering the question with clear sentences. Avoid mixing unrelated information and use correct verb forms.

예시: I don't have a job at the moment because I am a full-time student living with my parents after graduating from high school earlier this year.

제안: This answer does not address the question. Try to understand the question and respond appropriately. If unsure, ask for clarification politely or attempt a relevant answer.

예시: Since I am not currently working, I cannot say if the place is good to work. However, I hope to find a positive work environment in the future.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs better structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. Be concise and clear.

예시: I am not currently working, but my first job was as a content creator. I really enjoyed the work environment and interacting with people. Unfortunately, I had to leave because of time constraints.

제안: Your answer is relevant and shows your goals, but improve grammar and vocabulary for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid informal words like 'wanna'.

예시: In the future, I want to become a criminal psychologist to serve my country. I am interested in understanding the human mind, especially the minds of criminals and those who commit violent acts.

× I just graduated from high school in 2025.

✓ I just graduated from high school in 2023.

The sentence uses 'just graduated' which is past tense, but the year 2025 is in the future. The year should reflect a past or current time to match the past tense verb 'graduated'.

× I am taking an else exam right now for my university application.

✓ I am taking another exam right now for my university application.

The word 'else' is incorrectly used here. 'Another' is the correct quantifier to indicate an additional exam.

× I staying at my parents' house who just graduated from high school this year early so I don't have a job currently.

✓ I am staying at my parents' house. I just graduated from high school earlier this year, so I don't have a job currently.

The verb 'staying' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. Also, the sentence is run-on and unclear; splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× I staying at my parents' house who just graduated from high school this year early so I don't have a job currently.

✓ I am staying at my parents' house. I just graduated from high school earlier this year, so I don't have a job currently.

The relative pronoun 'who' incorrectly refers to 'parents' but the intended subject is the student. Rephrasing avoids confusion.

× I recently don't work anywhere and the last job I had was also my first job.

✓ I don't work anywhere recently, and the last job I had was also my first job.

The adverb 'recently' is better placed after the auxiliary verb 'do' for correct present tense negation.

× Very funny thing and it was as a content creator.

✓ It was a very interesting experience as a content creator.

The phrase 'Very funny thing' is awkward and unclear. 'Interesting experience' is more appropriate. Also, 'as a content creator' correctly indicates the role.

× I really love that place at the environment, I like interacting with people.

✓ I really loved the environment there; I liked interacting with people.

The phrase 'that place at the environment' is incorrect. 'The environment there' is correct. Also, past tense 'loved' and 'liked' match the past job context.

× However, due to time problem I had to give it.

✓ However, due to time problems, I had to quit it.

The phrase 'time problem' should be plural 'time problems'. Also, 'give it' is incorrect; 'quit it' or 'give it up' is appropriate for leaving a job.

× So in the future, I wanna be a criminal psychologist and serve the nation.

✓ So in the future, I want to be a criminal psychologist and serve the nation.

'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech or writing.

× Also, learn more about how interesting a human mindset is, especially of those who are criminals and those occurring violence act.

✓ Also, I want to learn more about how interesting the human mindset is, especially of those who are criminals and those who commit violent acts.

The sentence lacks a subject for 'learn'. 'Human mindset' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Those occurring violence act' is incorrect; it should be 'those who commit violent acts'.