Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Apni answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence structure onek bar bar hoyeche. Apni chesta korun prothome direct question er uttor dite, tarpor supporting details dite linking words use kore. Apnar answer ke aro natural korte simple ar clear sentence use korun.

예시: I am currently a student, but I also work as a computer designer. I usually spend two to three hours a day designing on my laptop. This helps me gain practical experience while studying.

제안: Apnar answer e kichu repetition ache ar kichu sentence clear na. Apni chesta korun sentence gulo ke short ar clear korte, ar linking words use kore answer ke logical banate. Specific details dite paren jemon kon dhoroner design apni koren.

예시: I work from home because it is convenient for me as a computer designer. This allows me to focus on different types of computer designs without any distractions.

제안: Apnar answer e kichu confusion ache ar sentence gulo onek bar bar hoyeche. Apni chesta korun prothome direct uttor dite, tarpor supporting details dite linking words use kore. Apnar feelings ar karon clear vabe bolun.

예시: Yes, working from home is a good place for me because it is comfortable and quiet. Since I am a student, it helps me balance my studies and work effectively.

제안: Apnar answer e kichu unclear ar grammar error ache. Apni chesta korun simple ar clear sentence use korte, ar proshner uttor direct dite. Apnar kach theke specific karon bolun keno apni oi jayga pochondo koren.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace very much because it is comfortable and peaceful. It gives me a good atmosphere to focus on my designing work.

제안: Apnar answer e kichu repetition ar filler words ache. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor clear ar shongothito vabe dite. Future plan er kotha bolte specific ar confident vabe bolun.

예시: In the future, I want to become a successful computer designer. I spend my free time practicing design, and I hope to achieve this goal within the next two years because I am passionate about this career.

× That's why I I working in the minimum two or three hours for in my laptop for designing.

✓ That's why I work at least two or three hours on my laptop designing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I working' instead of the correct form 'I work'. In English, after 'I', the base form of the verb is used unless it's a continuous tense with 'am'. Here, the intended meaning is habitual action, so simple present tense 'I work' is appropriate. Also, 'for in my laptop' is incorrect preposition usage; 'on my laptop' is correct.

× That's why I I working in the minimum two or three hours for in my laptop for designing.

✓ That's why I work at least two or three hours on my laptop designing.

The phrase 'for in my laptop' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate using a device is 'on'. Also, 'in the minimum' should be 'at least' to express minimum time.

× That's why I always try to design various types of peak of computer.

✓ That's why I always try to design various types of computer graphics.

The phrase 'peak of computer' is unclear and likely a misuse. Possibly the student meant 'types of computer graphics' or 'types of computer designs'. Also, 'types' is plural, so the following noun should be plural or appropriate.

× I work in my home because I am a computer designer, that's why easily I can get access and I work from my home that's why I don't go anywhere.

✓ I work at home because I am a computer designer, so I can easily access my work and I work from home, so I don't go anywhere.

The correct preposition for referring to one's residence is 'at home', not 'in my home'. Also, 'get access' should be 'access' or 'get access to' something specific. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Definitely it is a good way, good place for work because as a computer designer, that's why I do not get most of the time because I am a student, that's why I do work my home.

✓ Definitely, it is a good way and a good place to work because I am a computer designer. Since I am a student, I work from home most of the time.

The phrase 'good place for work' should be 'good place to work'. Also, 'do work my home' is incorrect; it should be 'work from home'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Definitely it is best place for me because I live they are all almost 18 years old.

✓ Definitely, it is the best place for me because I have lived here for almost 18 years.

The original sentence misuses 'I live they are all almost 18 years old', which is unclear. The intended meaning is likely the duration of residence, so 'I have lived here for almost 18 years' is correct.

× Eventually I go outside, but I think my working place, it is the different types of vibes.

✓ Sometimes I go outside, but I think my workplace has different types of vibes.

'Eventually' is not appropriate here; 'sometimes' fits better. Also, 'my working place, it is the different types of vibes' is ungrammatical; it should be 'my workplace has different types of vibes'. The sentence is corrected for conjunction and structure.

× Hopefully, uh, maybe one or two years later, I will be a computer designer.

✓ Hopefully, in one or two years, I will be a computer designer.

The phrase 'maybe one or two years later' is awkward. The correct future time expression is 'in one or two years'. The modal verb 'will' is correctly used here.