Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免语法错误，并且补充具体细节。

예시: I am an art teacher at a primary school. I enjoy my job because it allows me to encourage students' creativity and imagination. For example, I organize painting and craft projects that help them express their feelings and ideas.

제안: 回答较好，内容具体且连贯，但句子稍长，建议适当分句，使表达更清晰自然。

예시: I work at Sunrise Academy, an international primary school in Lijiang, Yunnan province. It is close to my home, so I save a lot of time commuting. The school is surrounded by beautiful nature, which makes working there very enjoyable.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和句子不完整，表达不够清晰。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并避免句子残缺。

예시: Yes, it is a great place to work. The school is located at the foot of Snow Mountain, making it very picturesque. Moreover, the supportive and collaborative work environment helps us complete tasks efficiently, especially when organizing school events.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，句子重复且不连贯。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用恰当的连接词。

예시: Absolutely. I like working there because it is a pleasant and beautiful place. Additionally, the supportive and collaborative environment makes my work easier and more enjoyable.

제안: 回答内容较好，但最后一句不完整，建议补充完整并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I plan to pursue a PhD specializing in art education. I believe advanced studies will open up greater long-term opportunities and allow me to contribute to educational innovation. Ultimately, I aim to build a successful career in this field.

× I met art teacher at the primary school and I really enjoy my job because it allows me to encourage students creativity and imagination.

✓ I met an art teacher at the primary school and I really enjoy my job because it allows me to encourage students' creativity and imagination.

这里缺少冠词“an”来修饰单数名词“art teacher”，并且“students creativity”缺少所有格，应为“students' creativity”。冠词和所有格的正确使用是英语语法的基本要求。

× It's very rewarding to see the earth.

✓ It's very rewarding to see their progress.

原句“see the earth”与上下文不符，应该表达看到学生的进步或成果，句子结构和语义需要调整以符合语境。

× Yes, of course the school is at the foot of Snow Mountain, so it's a beautiful and picturesque place to work and the work environment is supportive and collaborative, which makes things make it easy to get things done, especially when organizing school events and.

✓ Yes, of course the school is at the foot of Snow Mountain, so it's a beautiful and picturesque place to work. The work environment is supportive and collaborative, which makes it easy to get things done, especially when organizing school events.

原句过长且结构混乱，存在重复和不完整的表达，应拆分为两个句子，去除多余词汇，使句子结构清晰完整。

× Absolutely. I enjoy working there because it's a pleasant and picturesque place to work. What's more, the work environment is also supportive and collaborative, so which great help great.

✓ Absolutely. I enjoy working there because it's a pleasant and picturesque place to work. What's more, the work environment is also supportive and collaborative, which is a great help.

原句“so which great help great”语法错误且表达不清，应改为“which is a great help”以表达正确的意思和语法结构。

× I'm planning to pursue a PhD in my field specializing in art education. I believe advanced studies will open up greater long term opportunities and allow me to contribute to educational innovation. In the bigger picture, I'm aiming for a career.

✓ I'm planning to pursue a PhD in my field, specializing in art education. I believe advanced studies will open up greater long-term opportunities and allow me to contribute to educational innovation. In the bigger picture, I'm aiming for a career in this field.

原句“long term”应为复合形容词“long-term”，需要连字符连接；最后一句不完整，应补充“in this field”使表达完整。