Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and provides good information, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your answer concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, watch out for minor grammar errors like 'a a'.

예시: I have been working as an account manager at a large private company since 2014, where I lead a small team of two and support them in their tasks.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words like 'uh'. Try to complete your sentences fully and reduce fillers to sound more natural and confident. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I work at an IT firm located in the city center. As a team lead, I have many responsibilities, including managing customer support and ensuring client satisfaction.

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit short and slightly awkward at the beginning. Avoid hesitation and incomplete phrases. Try to expand your answer with linking words and more specific details.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because we have a supportive manager, friendly colleagues, and a positive atmosphere that makes work enjoyable.

제안: Your answer includes good points but is too long and filled with hesitations. Try to organize your ideas clearly using linking words and avoid filler words. Also, use plural forms correctly and be more concise.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because of the friendly colleagues and pleasant atmosphere. Additionally, there are convenient facilities like free parking and small stores on our floor where we can buy snacks, such as sandwiches.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear parts and minor grammar issues. Instead of 'watch a lot of courses', say 'take courses'. Also, specify which skills you want to improve and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: In the future, I plan to improve my skills by taking courses in management, sales, and accounting to enhance my professional abilities.

× I lead a a small team of two members and always support and take care of them.

✓ I lead a small team of two members and always support and take care of them.

The sentence contains a repeated article 'a a' which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'a' corrects the sentence. This is a singular article used correctly before 'small team'.

× Uh, my job involves a lot of responsibilities because I am a team lead and, uh, we must take care of customers and, uh, support them and, uh, I always.

✓ Uh, my job involves a lot of responsibilities because I am a team lead and we must take care of customers and support them, and I always do so.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'I always.' Completing the sentence with 'I always do so' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure error.

× It's a good place for. Yes, it is because we have a nice and supporting manager, kind colleagues and a nice atmosphere.

✓ It's a good place to work. Yes, it is because we have a nice and supportive manager, kind colleagues, and a nice atmosphere.

The phrase 'It's a good place for.' is incomplete and unclear. Changing it to 'It's a good place to work.' completes the thought. Also, 'supporting manager' is better expressed as 'supportive manager' to correctly use the adjective form.

× Yes, I like it because I have a good and nice colleagues, uh, nice atmosphere and uh, there are a lot of uh, facilities such as free parking and a little stores, which is located in our, uh, floor and you can buy something, for example, sandwich.

✓ Yes, I like it because I have good and nice colleagues, a nice atmosphere, and there are a lot of facilities such as free parking and a few stores, which are located on our floor, and you can buy something, for example, a sandwich.

The phrase 'a good and nice colleagues' incorrectly uses singular article 'a' with plural noun 'colleagues'. Removing 'a' corrects this. 'A little stores' is incorrect; 'a few stores' is appropriate for countable plural nouns. Also, 'which is located' should be 'which are located' to agree with plural 'stores'. 'On our floor' is the correct preposition. Adding 'a' before 'sandwich' is necessary as it is a singular countable noun.

× I want to upgrade my skills and watch a lot of courses such as management, sales, accounting to improve my UH skills.

✓ I want to upgrade my skills and take a lot of courses such as management, sales, and accounting to improve my skills.

The verb 'watch' is incorrect when referring to attending or completing courses; 'take' is the correct verb. Also, 'UH skills' seems unclear or a filler; removing 'UH' clarifies the sentence. Adding 'and' before 'accounting' improves the list structure.