Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to reduce hesitation sounds like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'which sell' to 'which sells'. Keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy by not repeating similar information.

예시: I work for a small company called Petroasis that sells instruments to oil companies. I've been working there for about two years and I enjoy the friendly atmosphere and my colleagues. However, the location is quite far from my home.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases and reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to improve fluency. Use correct vocabulary, for example, 'precises instruments' should be 'precise instruments'. Provide a clear and direct answer.

예시: I work at a small company called Petroasis that sells precise instruments to oil companies.

제안: Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words like 'but' or 'however'. Avoid filler words and improve grammar, for example, 'working environments' should be 'working environment' and 'crash hours' should be 'rush hours'.

예시: Yes, I am quite satisfied with my colleagues and the working environment; however, the location is quite far from my home, so I often get stuck in traffic during rush hours.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct response and explain your feelings clearly. Avoid excessive filler words and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because I worked hard to get the job. However, I find it inconvenient because it is far from my home and the work is not related to my interests.

제안: Try to express your future plans clearly and avoid repetition and filler words. Use complete sentences and explain your intentions with specific details. For example, clarify what you mean by 'high seas'.

예시: I intend to change my job and work in designing oil refinery processes, preferably in roles that involve offshore operations or work at sea.

× I work for a company, uh, which sell instruments for oil companies.

✓ I work for a company, uh, which sells instruments for oil companies.

The relative clause refers to 'a company', which is singular, so the verb should be 'sells' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving singular and plural forms.

× I'm pretty satisfied with my colleagues and working environments.

✓ I'm pretty satisfied with my colleagues and working environment.

The phrase 'working environments' is plural but usually 'working environment' is used as a singular collective noun to describe the general conditions. Using the singular form is more natural here.

× it's the location is uh, quite far from my home, making me get stuck umm, in traffic jam during crash hours.

✓ the location is uh, quite far from my home, making me get stuck umm, in a traffic jam during rush hours.

The phrase 'in traffic jam' is missing the article 'a' before 'traffic jam'. Also, 'crash hours' is incorrect; the correct term is 'rush hours'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and articles.

× We sell, uh, some, uh, precises instruments for, uh, oil companies.

✓ We sell, uh, some, uh, precise instruments to, uh, oil companies.

The adjective 'precises' is incorrect; the correct form is 'precise'. Also, the preposition 'for' should be 'to' when indicating the recipient of the instruments. This is an incorrect use of adjectives and prepositions.

× I want to, I intend to change my, uh, job and uh, have a job, uh, which is related to designing, uh, oil refinery process with umm, high seas, umm, high seas.

✓ I want to, I intend to change my, uh, job and uh, have a job, uh, which is related to designing, uh, oil refinery processes with, umm, high seas, umm, high seas.

The phrase 'oil refinery process' should be plural 'processes' to match the context of designing multiple processes. This is a singular and plural issue.