Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, say "I work full-time as a Business Development Manager at a software development company. My main responsibility is to handle sales and services simultaneously, and I enjoy this role because it helps me build good relationships and provide support."

예시: I work full-time as a Business Development Manager at a software development company. My main responsibility is to handle sales and services simultaneously, and I enjoy this role because it helps me build good relationships and provide support.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid repeating words and give more specific details. For example, say "I work at Frontier Tech Technologies, a software firm that offers various products for restaurants, retail, and offices. They mainly provide automation software to help businesses operate efficiently."

예시: I work at Frontier Tech Technologies, a software firm that offers various products for restaurants, retail, and offices. They mainly provide automation software to help businesses operate efficiently.

제안: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to say "Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers flexible working hours, which help me manage my time effectively. The relaxing environment keeps me focused and stress-free. Moreover, my coworkers are very friendly, so I enjoy working with them."

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers flexible working hours, which help me manage my time effectively. The relaxing environment keeps me focused and stress-free. Moreover, my coworkers are very friendly, so I enjoy working with them.

제안: Your answer has good content but some sentences are unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to say "I really enjoy working at my current workplace because my coworkers are friendly and supportive, which creates a collaborative environment. They often share delicious food during breaks, making it more enjoyable. Also, the management is very understanding and appreciative."

예시: I really enjoy working at my current workplace because my coworkers are friendly and supportive, which creates a collaborative environment. They often share delicious food during breaks, making it more enjoyable. Also, the management is very understanding and appreciative.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Also, Unilever and Nescafe are not IT firms. Try to be accurate and clear. For example, say "In the future, I plan to work as a marketing analyst at a large IT company. I believe this role will be a great success for my career."

예시: In the future, I plan to work as a marketing analyst at a large IT company. I believe this role will be a great success for my career.

× My main responsibility is provide SA sales and service both at a time and I enjoy this role because it allows to improve my kind relationship and support.

✓ My main responsibility is providing SA sales and service both at the same time and I enjoy this role because it allows me to improve my kind relationship and support.

The verb after 'is' should be in the -ing form to function as a gerund complement. Also, 'allows to improve' is incorrect; it should be 'allows me to improve' to include the subject of the verb 'improve'. Additionally, 'both at a time' is better expressed as 'both at the same time'. In English (Bangladesh): 'is provide' should be 'is providing' because after 'is' we use verb+ing form. Also, 'allows to improve' needs a subject 'me' before 'to improve'. 'both at a time' is not natural; better to say 'both at the same time'.

× My main responsibility is provide SA sales and service both at a time and I enjoy this role because it allows to improve my kind relationship and support.

✓ My main responsibility is providing SA sales and service both at the same time and I enjoy this role because it allows me to improve my kind relationships and support.

The phrase 'my kind relationship' is unclear and likely incorrect. It should be 'my kind relationships' or 'my relationships' to indicate multiple relationships. Also, 'support' here is vague; it might be better to specify or rephrase for clarity. In English (Bangladesh): 'kind relationship' is unclear and should be plural 'kind relationships' to make sense. Also, 'support' needs clarification or rephrasing for better understanding.

× They have various kind of product uh such as restaurant, retail, office based product.

✓ They have various kinds of products such as restaurant, retail, and office-based products.

The phrase 'various kind of product' is incorrect; it should be 'various kinds of products' because 'various' refers to multiple types, so plural forms are needed. Also, 'office based product' should be hyphenated as 'office-based products' and pluralized to match the list. In English (Bangladesh): 'various kind of product' is wrong; it should be 'various kinds of products' because 'various' means many types, so plural is needed. Also, 'office based' should be hyphenated and pluralized.

× It's it's called Frontier Tech Technologies.

✓ It's called Frontier Tech Technologies.

The repetition of 'It's' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'It's'. In English (Bangladesh): Saying 'It's it's' is a mistake; only one 'It's' is needed.

× My workplace are very much very flex flexible allowing me to manage my time effectively.

✓ My workplace is very flexible, allowing me to manage my time effectively.

'Workplace' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'very much very flex flexible' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'very flexible'. In English (Bangladesh): 'workplace' is singular, so use 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'very much very flex flexible' is wrong; just say 'very flexible'.

× Additionally, my coworker are very friendly so I enjoy working with them.

✓ Additionally, my coworkers are very friendly so I enjoy working with them.

'Coworker' is singular, but the sentence refers to multiple people, so it should be plural 'coworkers'. In English (Bangladesh): 'coworker' means one person; if talking about many, use 'coworkers'.

× I would say yes because my workplace are very much very flex flexible allowing me to manage my time effectively.

✓ I would say yes because my workplace is very flexible, allowing me to manage my time effectively.

The phrase 'very much very flex flexible' is incorrect and redundant. The correct adjective is 'flexible'. In English (Bangladesh): 'very much very flex flexible' is wrong; just say 'very flexible'.

× It allows to improve my kind relationship and support.

✓ It allows me to improve my kind relationships and support.

The verb 'allows' requires an object before the infinitive 'to improve'. The pronoun 'me' is missing. In English (Bangladesh): After 'allows' we need 'me' before 'to improve' to show who is allowed to do something.

× which creative present collaboration environment.

✓ which creates a present collaborative environment.

'Creative' is an adjective, but the verb needed is 'creates'. Also, 'present collaboration environment' is awkward; 'present collaborative environment' is better. In English (Bangladesh): 'creative' is adjective but here verb 'creates' is needed. Also, 'collaboration environment' should be 'collaborative environment'.

× It's more about the management is very understanding and appreciable.

✓ It's more about the management being very understanding and appreciative.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'It's more about the management is...' is awkward. Using 'being' and 'appreciative' (correct adjective) improves clarity. In English (Bangladesh): The sentence is not structured well; better to say 'It's more about the management being very understanding and appreciative'.

× I worked, uh, I will work as a marketing analyst and that would be huge success.

✓ I will work as a marketing analyst and that will be a huge success.

The phrase 'I worked' is unnecessary and confusing here. The future tense 'I will work' fits the context. Also, 'huge success' needs an article 'a'. In English (Bangladesh): 'I worked' is past tense and not needed here. Use 'I will work' for future plans. Also, say 'a huge success' with article 'a'.