Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to be more specific and concise. For example, clarify what "CC" stands for and avoid repeating your future plans in the same answer. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I am currently a student at American International University, studying computer science. My goal is to become a computer engineer. In the future, I hope to work at the airport in a related field.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and filled with hesitation sounds like "uh" and "umm." Try to answer directly and clearly without repeating information. Also, avoid filler words and keep your sentences concise and structured.

예시: I don't have a job at the moment because I am a first-semester computer science student at American International University. However, I plan to find a job related to my studies soon.

제안: Your answer is vague and incomplete. Avoid filler words and provide specific reasons why you think it is a good place to work. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment is friendly and supportive. Additionally, the facilities are modern, which helps me focus on my tasks.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many filler words and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your thoughts clearly, avoid repetition, and use specific details to explain why you like the place. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I really like the place because the atmosphere is pleasant and the people are supportive. This motivates me to work hard and stay focused on my studies.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using linking words and providing more specific details about your plans. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to expand your answer slightly within the 5-sentence limit.

예시: As a computer science student, I plan to become a computer engineer and software developer. I hope to find a good job at the airport, possibly in IT support or systems management. Eventually, I want to settle there and build my career.

× I also want to go to the airport and do a job there.

✓ I also want to go to the airport and get a job there.

The phrase 'do a job' is not commonly used in English to express employment. The correct expression is 'get a job' or 'find a job.' Using 'get' properly conveys the intention of obtaining employment.

× I want to hold a job there.

✓ I want to have a job there.

The verb 'hold' is not typically used with 'job' in this context. The correct verb is 'have' to indicate possessing or maintaining employment.

× I like the place very much because there are, umm, uh, so many environmental.

✓ I like the place very much because there is a good environment.

The word 'environmental' is an adjective and cannot stand alone as a noun. The correct noun is 'environment.' Also, 'so many' is used with countable nouns, but 'environment' is uncountable, so 'a good environment' is appropriate.

× The polyps are very supportive and motivating that uh that motivates my work to do and uh that was clear is also very nice.

✓ The people are very supportive and motivating, which encourages me to work, and the atmosphere is also very nice.

'Polyps' is incorrect; the intended word is 'people.' Also, the sentence structure is unclear and contains pronoun errors. Replacing 'that' with 'which' and clarifying the sentence improves meaning and grammar.

× So I like the place very much uh it's a nice place to stay focused uh where uh I and also I.

✓ So I like the place very much; it's a nice place to stay focused and work well.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. Completing the thought and connecting ideas with proper conjunctions and punctuation improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I want to go to airport and to find a good job there and I also want to settle there.

✓ I want to go to the airport to find a good job there, and I also want to settle there.

The phrase 'go to airport' is missing the definite article 'the.' Also, 'to find' should not be separated by 'and' in this context; combining the infinitive phrases improves sentence flow.