Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is too long and lacks clear structure. Try to give a direct response first, then add supporting details with proper linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

예시: I am currently a student. I recently completed my intermediate exam, and I plan to study abroad for higher education. My favorite subject is biology because I find it fascinating.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Provide a direct answer first, then explain your situation clearly using correct grammar and linking words.

예시: I don't work at the moment because I am still a student. Therefore, I have no job experience yet, but I hope to find a suitable job in the future.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Since you don't work, you can say so directly and briefly, avoiding unnecessary repetition.

예시: I am not currently working, so I don't have an opinion about any workplace. I am focusing on my studies right now.

제안: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Simply state that you are not working and therefore cannot comment on the workplace. Use correct grammar and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Since I am not working yet, I don't have a workplace to like or dislike. I am concentrating on my education currently.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use clear sentences with linking words to express your plans and reasons.

예시: In the future, I plan to become a doctor. I am working very hard to achieve this goal. I believe being a doctor is one of the most meaningful professions in the world.

× I am a student recently I completed in intermediate exam and now I am planning to go in abroad in higher education and my favorite subject is biology and my.

✓ I am a student. Recently, I completed the intermediate exam, and now I am planning to go abroad for higher education. My favorite subject is biology.

The original sentence has incorrect use of past tense and prepositions. 'Completed in intermediate exam' should be 'completed the intermediate exam' (correct past tense and article usage). 'Go in abroad' is incorrect; it should be 'go abroad' (no preposition 'in' needed). Also, the sentence was run-on and needed punctuation for clarity.

× I am a student recently I completed in intermediate exam and now I am planning to go in abroad in higher education and my favorite subject is biology and my.

✓ I am a student. Recently, I completed the intermediate exam, and now I am planning to go abroad for higher education. My favorite subject is biology.

The phrase 'go in abroad' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go abroad' without 'in'. Also, 'in higher education' should be 'for higher education' to correctly express purpose.

× I am a student recently I completed in intermediate exam and now I am planning to go in abroad in higher education and my favorite subject is biology and my.

✓ I am a student. Recently, I completed the intermediate exam, and now I am planning to go abroad for higher education. My favorite subject is biology.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't have any work uh, because I still a student and I have no experience for this job and I have don't idea in any job. Uh, I wish.

✓ I don't have any work because I am still a student, and I have no experience for this job. I don't have any idea about any job. I wish I did.

The sentence has multiple issues: missing verb 'am' in 'I still a student', incorrect phrase 'I have don't idea' should be 'I don't have any idea', and awkward phrasing. Also, 'uh' is filler and can be omitted for clarity.

× I don't have any work uh, because I still a student and I have no experience for this job and I have don't idea in any job. Uh, I wish.

✓ I don't have any work because I am still a student, and I have no experience for this job. I don't have any idea about any job. I wish I did.

The phrase 'I have don't idea' is incorrect pronoun and auxiliary verb usage. The correct form is 'I don't have any idea'. Also, 'I still a student' is missing the verb 'am'.

× I don't work at the moment because I'm still a student. I have no idea which is place to go and I am a student. I don't idea for this any job.

✓ I don't work at the moment because I'm still a student. I have no idea which place to go to, and I am a student. I don't have any idea about any job.

The phrase 'which is place to go' is incorrect; it should be 'which place to go to'. Also, 'I don't idea' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't have any idea'. The sentence also repeats 'I am a student' unnecessarily.

× I don't work at the moment because I'm still a student. I have no idea which is place to go and I am a student. I don't idea for this any job.

✓ I don't work at the moment because I'm still a student. I have no idea which place to go to, and I am a student. I don't have any idea about any job.

The phrase 'which is place to go' is incorrect; it should be 'which place to go to'. Also, 'I don't idea for this any job' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't have any idea about any job'.

× I am not a worker, still I am a student so I have no idea which is place is very good. So I have don't work, don't work.

✓ I am not a worker; I am still a student, so I have no idea which place is very good. So, I don't work.

The phrase 'I have don't work' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't work'. Also, 'which is place is very good' is incorrect; it should be 'which place is very good'. The sentence needs proper punctuation for clarity.

× I am not a worker, still I am a student so I have no idea which is place is very good. So I have don't work, don't work.

✓ I am not a worker; I am still a student, so I have no idea which place is very good. So, I don't work.

The sentence is run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Using semicolons and commas improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× In future my watch plan is to be a doctor. I struggle with very hard and recently I completed in intermediate exam. Doctor is one of the most meaningful profession in the world.

✓ In the future, my work plan is to be a doctor. I will struggle very hard, and recently I completed the intermediate exam. Being a doctor is one of the most meaningful professions in the world.

'In future' should be 'In the future' (article usage). 'My watch plan' is likely a typo for 'my work plan'. 'I struggle with very hard' should be 'I will struggle very hard' to indicate future intention. 'Completed in intermediate exam' should be 'completed the intermediate exam'. 'Doctor is one of the most meaningful profession' should be 'Being a doctor is one of the most meaningful professions' (gerund and plural noun usage).