Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应注意语法完整性和表达清晰，避免语句不连贯。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并适当使用连接词使表达更自然。

예시: I am currently studying economics at Dunbar University of Finance and Economics. I sometimes do part-time jobs, but recently I have been focusing more on my studies because I have many exams this month and next month.

제안: 回答中应避免频繁使用填充词如“uh”和“umm”，并且应更具体地描述工作内容。建议使用连贯的句子表达工作职责和未来计划。

예시: I work at a media company where I prepare reports related to government policies and the electricity sector. Occasionally, I also cover topics about astronomy. I enjoy this job and plan to continue studying this field to earn a new degree next year.

제안: 回答应避免重复表达，注意语法和词汇的准确使用。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并具体说明工作环境和挑战。

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because my colleagues are very kind and supportive. They provide me with valuable practical experience, and my job is challenging, which I find very rewarding.

제안: 回答中应避免重复词汇，注意句子结构的完整性。建议更自然地描述工作地点的便利性和周边环境。

예시: Yes, I like the place where I work. It is located in a busy area near a subway station, which makes commuting very convenient. There are also many good restaurants and a large shopping mall nearby.

제안: 回答应避免使用填充词，表达应更清晰和连贯。建议明确说明未来计划，并使用适当的连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: I plan to take a break from work to pursue another degree in media because I already have two degrees in economics. I hope this will help me find a better job in the future. I expect to return to work in three or four years with more qualifications.

× Am now studying in Dunbar University of Finance and Economics and a major in economics and I sometimes do some part time job but I'm not focused on my study because I will have many examination in this month and next month.

✓ I am now studying at Dunbar University of Finance and Economics, majoring in economics. I sometimes do some part-time jobs, but I'm not focused on my studies because I will have many examinations this month and next month.

句子缺少主语“I”，且“a major in economics”表达不完整，应改为“majoring in economics”。“part time job”应为复数形式“part-time jobs”。“examination”应为复数“examinations”。“in this month”应改为“this month”。整体句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子以表达清晰。

× Am now studying in Dunbar University of Finance and Economics and a major in economics and I sometimes do some part time job but I'm not focused on my study because I will have many examination in this month and next month.

✓ I am now studying at Dunbar University of Finance and Economics, majoring in economics. I sometimes do some part-time jobs, but I'm not focused on my studies because I will have many examinations this month and next month.

表示在某个大学学习，介词应使用“at”而非“in”。

× I sometimes do some part time job but I'm not focused on my study because I will have many examination in this month and next month.

✓ I sometimes do some part-time jobs, but I'm not focused on my studies because I will have many examinations this month and next month.

“part time job”应为复数“part-time jobs”，“study”应为复数“studies”，“examination”应为复数“examinations”，因为表示多次考试。

× I work in a media company and I do some, uh, report for government and electricity and uh, maybe sometimes astronomy.

✓ I work at a media company and I do some reports for the government, electricity, and maybe sometimes astronomy.

表示在某公司工作，介词应使用“at”而非“in”。“report”应为复数“reports”。“government”前应加定冠词“the”。

× I work in a media company and I do some, uh, report for government and electricity and uh, maybe sometimes astronomy.

✓ I work at a media company and I do some reports for the government, electricity, and maybe sometimes astronomy.

“report”应为复数“reports”，因为表示多份报告。

× I really like this job and I will keep studying, umm, about this major and make a new degree next year.

✓ I really like this job and I will keep studying this major and get a new degree next year.

“studying about this major”表达不正确，动词“study”后不加“about”，直接加宾语。

× Yes, it's a good, it's a good place to work as my work mate are so nice and warm hearted and they can give me some practical experience for me and my work is full of challenges and that's so amazing.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work as my workmates are so nice and warm-hearted and they can give me some practical experience. My work is full of challenges and that's so amazing.

“work mate”应为复数“workmates”。主谓一致，复数主语用复数动词“are”。“warm hearted”应连写为“warm-hearted”。句子过长，建议拆分。

× Yes, the place I work is in a busy busy area and is near a subway station so I can get there so conveniently and there are so many restaurants with good taste, food and a big super mall near here.

✓ Yes, the place I work is in a busy area and is near a subway station, so I can get there very conveniently. There are many restaurants with tasty food and a big shopping mall nearby.

“busy busy”重复，应去掉一个“busy”。“good taste, food”表达不自然，应改为“tasty food”。“super mall”应为“shopping mall”。“near here”应改为“nearby”。

× Yes, the place I work is in a busy busy area and is near a subway station so I can get there so conveniently and there are so many restaurants with good taste, food and a big super mall near here.

✓ Yes, the place I work is in a busy area and is near a subway station, so I can get there very conveniently. There are many restaurants with tasty food and a big shopping mall nearby.

“near here”用法不当，正确表达应为“nearby”。

× I plan to stop working for a period of time. I want to get another degree of media 'cause I have two degrees of economics.

✓ I plan to stop working for a period of time. I want to get another degree in media because I have two degrees in economics.

“degree of media”应为“degree in media”，“cause”应为“because”正式表达。

× I want to get another degree of media 'cause I have two degrees of economics.

✓ I want to get another degree in media because I have two degrees in economics.

“degree of”用法错误，正确搭配是“degree in”。

× So I want to, uh, do something else to, uh, get a good future job. So, uh, maybe in three years or four years I will keep working as a more.

✓ So I want to do something else to get a good job in the future. Maybe in three or four years, I will continue working as before.

“keep working as a more”表达不清，语法错误。应改为“continue working as before”或类似表达。句子结构混乱，需调整使表达清晰。