Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer deer iluu todorhoi, emnelegtei helbertei, zohitsuulaltai ug helj, ug helberiin aldaa, tsugluulsan ug helber, ug helberiin davtagdaltai baidalig zohitsuulah heregtei. Mungoliin hel deer English helnii baidal, ug helberiin aldaa baigaa tul English helnii baidliig saijruulah heregtei.

예시: I work in the administration and translation department of the mining industry. I have been in this role for seven years, mainly handling timesheets and translating materials between English and Mongolian. I find this job quite rewarding because it allows me to use my language skills and contribute to the company's success.

제안: Ug helber, ug songolt, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug helber ni todorhoi, bogino, todorhoi baih heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei.

예시: I work at Gorika Mongolia, an Australian-based multinational company that provides blasting services worldwide. The company has a history of 150 years and operates in 100 countries. I currently work in the administration department.

제안: Ug helber, ug songolt, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug helber ni todorhoi, bogino, todorhoi baih heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei.

예시: Yes, I think it is an excellent place to work. My office is spacious, quiet, and comfortable, which helps me concentrate. Moreover, my colleagues are friendly and approachable, making the work environment pleasant.

제안: Ug helber, ug songolt, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug helber ni todorhoi, bogino, todorhoi baih heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei.

예시: Yes, definitely. I admire Delica Parkour's innovation and their significant contributions to technology worldwide. I am excited to play a key role in the company's future development.

제안: Ug helber, ug songolt, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei. Ug helber ni todorhoi, bogino, todorhoi baih heregtei. Ug davtagdalt, ug helberiin aldaa, ug zohitsuulalt deer anhaarah heregtei.

예시: In the next few years, I plan to pursue a master's degree in Business Administration at the Mongolian National University. This will help me develop my skills and advance my career in the future.

× I'm working at the administration translation in mining industry.

✓ I work in administration translation in the mining industry.

The present continuous tense 'I'm working' is incorrectly used here for a permanent job. The simple present tense 'I work' is appropriate for regular or permanent actions. Also, 'at the administration translation' is awkward; 'in administration translation' is better. 'Mining industry' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific industry.

× I have been working this role for the seven years

✓ I have been working in this role for seven years

The preposition 'in' is needed before 'this role' to indicate the position held. Also, 'the seven years' is incorrect; 'seven years' without 'the' is correct when referring to a duration.

× also translate materials between English to Mongolia.

✓ also translate materials between English and Mongolian.

The phrase 'between English to Mongolia' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'and' when indicating two languages. Also, 'Mongolia' is a country; the language is 'Mongolian'.

× I'm working Gorika Mongolia company which is Australian based, the multinational company providing blasting service around the world

✓ I work at Gorika Mongolia company, which is Australian-based, a multinational company providing blasting services around the world

Again, simple present tense 'I work' is better for a permanent job. 'Working Gorika Mongolia company' lacks a preposition; 'work at' is correct. 'Australian based' should be hyphenated as 'Australian-based'. 'Blasting service' should be plural 'services' to match the context.

× our company has 150 years history and operating 100 countries around the world

✓ our company has 150 years of history and operates in 100 countries around the world

'150 years history' needs the preposition 'of' to form '150 years of history'. 'Operating 100 countries' is incorrect; the company 'operates in' countries, and the verb should be in simple present 'operates' to agree with the singular subject 'company'.

× I'm currently working administration.

✓ I'm currently working in administration.

The preposition 'in' is needed after 'working' to indicate the department or field.

× my office is spacious, umm quite and comfortable

✓ my office is spacious, quiet, and comfortable

'Quite' is an adverb, but here the adjective 'quiet' is intended to describe the office environment. The correct adjective is 'quiet'.

× it provides me easy to concentrate the work workers

✓ it makes it easy for me to concentrate on my work

The original sentence is ungrammatical. 'Provides me easy to concentrate the work workers' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'makes it easy for me to concentrate on my work'. Also, 'work workers' is incorrect; 'my work' is appropriate.

× moreover my colleagues is friendly to approachable and.

✓ moreover, my colleagues are friendly and approachable.

'Colleagues' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'friendly to approachable' is incorrect; it should be 'friendly and approachable'.

× I admire Delica Parkour's, their innovation and staple development for the technology around the world, around the world.

✓ I admire Delica Parkour's innovation and stable development of technology around the world.

The phrase 'their innovation and staple development for the technology' is awkward. 'Staple' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'stable'. Also, 'for the technology' should be 'of technology'. Repetition of 'around the world' is unnecessary.

× I'm so excited to contribute the company's key role, key role around the world.

✓ I'm so excited to contribute to the company's key role around the world.

The verb 'contribute' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. Repetition of 'key role' is unnecessary.

× In the next upcoming years, I planned to pursue my master's degree as Business Administration in the Mongolian National University.

✓ In the next few years, I plan to pursue my master's degree in Business Administration at the Mongolian National University.

'Planned' is past tense, but the sentence refers to future plans, so 'plan' (present tense) is correct. 'As Business Administration' is incorrect; it should be 'in Business Administration'. 'In the Mongolian National University' should be 'at the Mongolian National University'. 'Next upcoming years' is redundant; 'next few years' is better.

× It helps to developing my skills and improving my career careers in the future.

✓ It helps me develop my skills and improve my career in the future.

'Helps to developing' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me develop'. 'Career careers' is redundant; use 'career'.