Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and prepositions, and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, say "I am a student. I recently completed my intermediate exam and now I am planning to pursue higher education abroad."

예시: I am a student. I recently completed my intermediate exam, and now I am planning to pursue higher education abroad.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "I don't work because I am a student. However, I am excited about the opportunity to study in a different country abroad."

예시: I don't work because I am a student. However, I am excited about the opportunity to study in a different country abroad.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like "uh" and speak more fluently. Also, clarify what "it" refers to and use more precise vocabulary. For example, "Yes, I believe it is a great place to study because the environment is friendly, supportive, and refreshing, which helps me stay motivated."

예시: Yes, I believe it is a great place to study because the environment is friendly, supportive, and refreshing, which helps me stay motivated.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Make sure to answer directly and clearly, avoid filler sounds, and provide specific reasons. For example, "Yes, I like the place where I study. Australia is a beautiful and interesting country, and I enjoy living here."

예시: Yes, I like the place where I study. Australia is a beautiful and interesting country, and I enjoy living here.

제안: Your answer is vague and could be improved by explaining your thoughts more clearly and politely. Instead of focusing only on money, you could mention your current priorities and openness to future opportunities. For example, "I don't have specific work plans yet because I am currently focusing on my studies, but I hope to find a rewarding job in the future."

예시: I don't have specific work plans yet because I am currently focusing on my studies, but I hope to find a rewarding job in the future.

× I'm a student, recently I completed in intermediate exam and now I'm planning to higher education in abroad.

✓ I'm a student. Recently, I completed the intermediate exam and now I'm planning to pursue higher education abroad.

The original sentence has incorrect verb usage and prepositions. 'Completed in intermediate exam' should be 'completed the intermediate exam' because 'complete' is a transitive verb requiring a direct object without 'in'. 'Planning to higher education in abroad' is incorrect; it should be 'planning to pursue higher education abroad' because 'plan to' is followed by a verb in base form, and 'abroad' does not need a preposition 'in'. Also, the sentence needs to be split for clarity.

× I don't have any work because I am a student and now I'm planning to go in abroad and I.

✓ I don't have any work because I am a student and now I'm planning to go abroad.

The phrase 'go in abroad' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go abroad' without any preposition. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and I', which is incomplete and should be removed for clarity.

× And I'm really excited about the opportunity to study in different country.

✓ And I'm really excited about the opportunity to study in a different country.

The phrase 'in different country' is missing the article 'a' before 'different country' because singular countable nouns require an article.

× Yes, I believe it is a good place to uh, uh, education because, uh, this environment is very friendly and supportive and refreshing, which helps, uh, me stay motivated.

✓ Yes, I believe it is a good place for education because this environment is very friendly, supportive, and refreshing, which helps me stay motivated.

The phrase 'a good place to education' is incorrect; it should be 'a good place for education' because 'place for' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, unnecessary filler words 'uh' are removed for clarity. The adjectives are better connected with commas and 'and' for proper listing.

× MMM yes, I like the place. Hawaii, why I'm a student. Uh, because I Australia is very nice place and interesting place and now I'm.

✓ Yes, I like the place. Hawaii is a very nice and interesting place, and I am a student there now.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Hawaii, why I'm a student' is not a proper sentence. It should be restructured to 'Hawaii is a very nice and interesting place, and I am a student there now.' Also, 'I Australia' is incorrect; it should be 'I am a student there' or similar. The sentence ending with 'and now I'm' is incomplete and should be completed or removed.

× I have no idea for future work plans because my focus only on money.

✓ I have no idea about future work plans because my focus is only on money.

The phrase 'no idea for future work plans' should be 'no idea about future work plans' because 'idea about' is the correct collocation. Also, 'my focus only on money' is missing the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.