Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，且有重复和冗余。建议简化句子结构，注意时态一致，避免重复，并准确表达职位和职责。

예시: I have worked at a bank in Nanjing for almost three years as a client account manager. I am responsible for analyzing corporate clients' financial reports and assisting them with loan applications.

제안: 回答中存在时态混用和语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确时态，避免口语填充词，清晰描述工作内容。

예시: I work at a bank in Nanjing, which is my first job after graduation. I analyze financial reports of large businesses and help them obtain loans when needed.

제안: 回答中重复使用填充词，表达不完整且不具体。建议减少口语填充词，具体说明工作环境和管理层的优点。

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because the bank has clear regulations and supportive directors who often provide valuable guidance.

제안: 表达不够流畅，语法错误较多，且内容不够具体。建议明确表达不喜欢的原因，并用连贯的句子说明。

예시: I do not like my current job because I studied French at university, but I cannot use my language skills at work. Also, I feel my finance skills are not strong enough for this role.

제안: 回答中有语法和发音填充词问题，表达稍显重复。建议简洁明了地说明未来计划，避免口语填充词。

예시: In the future, I want to become a teacher. Currently, I am preparing to apply for a PhD program in language education to improve my teaching skills.

× I work as a a client applying to manager.

✓ I work as a client applying to be a manager.

这里的表达不清晰，应该是“申请成为经理”，需要加上“to be”来表达目的。

× I working on their financial reports and give them loss.

✓ I am working on their financial reports and give them loans.

动词“working”前缺少助动词“am”，且“give them loss”应为“give them loans”，表示给他们贷款。

× I walked in a bank in Nanjing.

✓ I worked in a bank in Nanjing.

这里应该用“worked”表示过去的工作经历，“walked”是走路的意思，语义不符。

× I worked for this awesome big businesses.

✓ I worked for these awesome big businesses.

“businesses”是复数，前面的指示代词应为“these”而非“this”。

× I analyze their financial report and uh gave the give them loans umm when they need.

✓ I analyze their financial reports and give them loans when they need.

“analyze”与“give”应保持时态一致，且“financial report”应为复数“financial reports”。

× I walked in a bank in Nanjing.

✓ I worked at a bank in Nanjing.

表示工作地点时，通常用介词“at”而非“in”。

× I analyze their financial report and uh gave the give them loans umm when they need.

✓ I analyze their financial reports and give them loans when they need.

前半句用现在时，后半句不应用过去时“gave”，应保持时态一致。

× the regulations and are very perfect, perfect, perfect.

✓ the regulations are very strict and perfect.

“perfect”用来形容规章制度不太合适，通常用“strict”表示严格，且“and”前多余。

× I do not like the place I work 'cause I'm in the university, I studied French, but in my work I cannot, uh, cannot use my language skills and, uh, not very, uh, good at, uh, financing skills.

✓ I do not like the place where I work because I studied French at university, but in my work I cannot use my language skills and I am not very good at finance skills.

“the place I work”应为“the place where I work”，且“I'm in the university”表达不准确，应为“studied French at university”。

× I want to become a teacher, so right now I'm preparing out for start applying for a PHDI want to learn UH, language education in a PhD study.

✓ I want to become a teacher, so right now I'm preparing to start applying for a PhD. I want to study language education in my PhD.

“preparing out for start applying”表达错误，应为“preparing to start applying”，且“learn UH”不通顺，应改为“study”。

× I want to strengthen my UH skills in the PhD study.

✓ I want to strengthen my language skills in the PhD study.

“UH”是口头语填充词，书面表达应去除，明确指代“language skills”。