Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words like 'complete complete' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

예시: I am a student and recently completed my HSC examination. Now, I am preparing for the IELTS exam because I want to study abroad.

제안: Your answer is clear but a bit long and repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating the same reasons multiple times.

예시: I don't work currently because I am a student. However, I am focusing on preparing for the IELTS exam to study abroad and gain international experience.

제안: Your answer is off-topic since you do not have a workplace to describe. Try to answer directly and avoid repeating your study plans here. Instead, you can say you don't work currently and briefly explain why.

예시: I don't have a workplace at the moment because I am a full-time student focusing on my studies.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear meaning. Also, since you do not work, this question is difficult to answer. Try to clarify your answer and use correct grammar and vocabulary.

예시: Although I don't currently work, if I did, I would like my workplace to be clean and comfortable so that it feels like home.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice.

예시: I want to become a doctor because I enjoy helping people and providing them with medical care.

× I am a student and recently I have completed complete my HSC examination and now I want to study abroad for that's why I took preparation for IELTS examination.

✓ I am a student and recently I have completed my HSC examination and now I want to study abroad, so that's why I am preparing for the IELTS examination.

The phrase 'have completed complete' is redundant; only 'have completed' is correct. Also, 'took preparation' is incorrect; the correct form is 'am preparing' to indicate ongoing action. Use 'so that's why' to connect the ideas properly.

× I want to study abroad for that's why I took preparation for IELTS examination.

✓ I want to study abroad, so that's why I am preparing for the IELTS examination.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used here. The correct conjunction to connect the reason is 'so'. Also, 'took preparation' is incorrect; 'am preparing' is the correct form.

× I do not get enough time for work and now I'm focusing on preparing for IELTS exam because I want to study abroad and gain international experience.

✓ I do not get enough time to work and now I'm focusing on preparing for the IELTS exam because I want to study abroad and gain international experience.

The phrase 'time for work' should be 'time to work' to correctly express the purpose. Also, 'IELTS exam' should be 'the IELTS exam' for proper article usage.

× I do not get enough time for work and now I'm focusing on preparing for IELTS exam because I want to study abroad and gain international experience.

✓ I do not get enough time to work and now I'm focusing on preparing for the IELTS exam because I want to study abroad and gain international experience.

The article 'the' is needed before 'IELTS exam' because it refers to a specific exam.

× I want to study abroad and gaining international experience.

✓ I want to study abroad and gain international experience.

After 'want to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. So 'gain' is correct instead of 'gaining'.

× Yes, I like the place where I am work because it was always cleaning and it gives us and it gives us a feel like home.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it is always clean and it gives us a feeling like home.

The phrase 'where I am work' is incorrect; it should be 'where I work'. 'It was always cleaning' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it is always clean'. Also, 'it gives us and it gives us a feel like home' is repetitive and awkward; 'it gives us a feeling like home' is better.

× Yes, I like the place where I am work because it was always cleaning and it gives us and it gives us a feel like home.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it is always clean and it gives us a feeling like home.

The phrase 'a feel like home' should be 'a feeling like home' to use the correct noun form after 'gives us'.

× I want to become a doctor because I always help. I want to always help people and give them services.

✓ I want to become a doctor because I always want to help people and provide them with services.

The sentence 'I always help' is incomplete and unclear. Combining the ideas into one sentence with proper verb forms improves clarity. Also, 'give them services' is better expressed as 'provide them with services'.