Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'I'm being working' and 'since I'm have graduated'. Try to use the present perfect continuous tense correctly and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and clear.

예시: I have been working as a registered nurse in the emergency department for about five years. I started at the same hospital right after I graduated in 2018.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by combining sentences for better flow and adding a linking phrase. Also, avoid repeating 'working' unnecessarily.

예시: I currently work in the emergency department at Woodland Health Campus, a hospital in Singapore.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'good place to walk' and 'The Walking culture'. Try to use precise vocabulary and avoid filler words. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: I think it's a good place to work in the emergency department because of the strong teamwork culture. My colleagues are very supportive and always willing to help when needed, which makes the work environment positive and efficient.

제안: Your answer contains repeated grammatical mistakes such as 'I walk at' instead of 'I work at' and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I love working at my current workplace because of the friendly people. Over the past five years, I have developed strong friendships with my colleagues and a good relationship with my supervisor, which makes it a pleasant place to work.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to express your future plans clearly and confidently, using correct verb forms and avoiding filler words. Also, be specific about your goals.

예시: In the future, I plan to continue developing my career by taking on more responsibilities and eventually moving into a management role within the healthcare sector.

× I work, actually I'm being working as a registered nurse as an emergency department for about 5 years.

✓ I work, actually I've been working as a registered nurse in an emergency department for about 5 years.

The phrase 'I'm being working' is incorrect. The correct present perfect continuous form is 'I've been working' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× I work, actually I'm being working as a registered nurse as an emergency department for about 5 years.

✓ I work, actually I've been working as a registered nurse in an emergency department for about 5 years.

The preposition 'as' is incorrectly used before 'emergency department'. The correct preposition is 'in' to indicate working within a department.

× Umm, I've been working at the same hospital since I'm have graduated from 2020.

✓ Umm, I've been working at the same hospital since I graduated in 2020.

The phrase 'since I'm have graduated' is grammatically incorrect. 'Since' should be followed by a past simple tense, so 'I graduated' is correct. Also, 'from 2020' should be 'in 2020'.

× Currently I am working in one of the hospitals in Singapore in an emergency department.

✓ Currently I am working in one of the hospitals in Singapore in the emergency department.

When referring to a specific department within a hospital, the definite article 'the' is used before 'emergency department'.

× It's called Woodland Health Campus.

✓ It's called the Woodland Health Campus.

Proper nouns like names of places often require the definite article 'the' when the name includes words like 'Campus'.

× Well, I would say it's a good place to walk in an emergency department, uh, because of The Walking culture and the people at there, especially my colleague, they are very supportive and helpful whenever, whenever I need help working in emergency department.

✓ Well, I would say it's a good place to work in an emergency department, uh, because of the working culture and the people there, especially my colleagues; they are very supportive and helpful whenever I need help working in the emergency department.

The word 'walk' is a typo and should be 'work'. 'The Walking culture' should be 'the working culture'. 'At there' is incorrect; 'there' alone is sufficient. 'Colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to match the context. Also, 'in emergency department' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Uh, teamwork is, uh, really, uh, an essentials things.

✓ Uh, teamwork is, uh, really, uh, an essential thing.

'Essentials things' is incorrect; 'essential' is the correct adjective form and 'thing' should be singular to match the article 'an'.

× Uh, yes, I love the place that I walk at because of the people at there.

✓ Uh, yes, I love the place where I work because of the people there.

The verb 'walk' is incorrect; it should be 'work'. The phrase 'at there' is incorrect; 'there' alone is correct. Also, 'that I walk at' is better expressed as 'where I work'.

× Umm, I'm being working at there for about 5 years.

✓ Umm, I've been working there for about 5 years.

The phrase 'I'm being working' is incorrect. The correct present perfect continuous form is 'I've been working'. Also, 'at there' is incorrect; 'there' alone is sufficient.

× So I have been a very good friendship with some of my colleagues then as well as with my supervisor as well.

✓ So I have had a very good friendship with some of my colleagues as well as with my supervisor.

'I have been a very good friendship' is incorrect because 'friendship' is a noun and cannot be used with 'been' in this way. The correct expression is 'I have had a very good friendship'. Also, 'then as well as' is redundant; 'as well as' suffices.

× So is, I will say is a nice place for me to walk at.

✓ So, I would say it is a nice place for me to work at.

The verb 'walk' is incorrect; it should be 'work'. The phrase 'for me to walk at' is better expressed as 'for me to work at'. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Uh, well, I think the, one of the things that we'll do in the future is to, to, continues to launch and, uh, to grow my career in the future and making, uh, bigger steps in, uh, in an important role, especially in managements.

✓ Uh, well, I think one of the things that I'll do in the future is to continue to learn and grow my career, making bigger steps into an important role, especially in management.

'We'll do' is changed to 'I'll do' to match the speaker's intention. 'Continues to launch' is incorrect; it should be 'continue to learn'. 'Managements' is incorrect plural; 'management' is uncountable. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.