Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is informative but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid repeating information unnecessarily. Also, keep your answer concise and clear.

예시: I am currently a master's student in chemistry at Birendra Multiple Campus. Besides studying, I work as a lab assistant at Oracle Science School, where I help students with experiments and research projects.

제안: Avoid repeating information already given and improve sentence structure. Use plural forms correctly and provide a clear, direct answer without redundancy.

예시: I work as a lab assistant at Archive Sciences School, where I assist students with various experiments and project work.

제안: Improve grammar and vocabulary by using correct adjectives and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Be more specific about why the place is good to work.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because the school is surrounded by greenery, and the staff and colleagues are very friendly, which makes me feel comfortable and supported.

제안: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid repeating words. Be specific about what you like and how it benefits you.

예시: Yes, I like working at the school because it not only involves students but also teaches me discipline and exposes me to various research projects, which help me in my studies.

제안: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid repetition and provide a concise, direct answer. Use linking words to explain your plans logically.

예시: As I mentioned, I am pursuing a master's degree in chemistry, and in the future, I want to work as a chemist in a pharmaceutical company or related industries.

× I am currently a student pursuing a master degree in chemistry at Birendra Multiple campus.

✓ I am currently a student pursuing a master's degree in chemistry at Birendra Multiple Campus.

The phrase 'master degree' requires the possessive form 'master's degree' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'campus' is a proper noun here and should be capitalized as 'Campus'.

× Beside my studies, I work as a lab assistant I at Oracle Science School where I help student with various experiment and research work.

✓ Besides my studies, I work as a lab assistant I at Oracle Science School where I help students with various experiments and research work.

The correct preposition is 'Besides' instead of 'Beside' when meaning 'in addition to'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' because it refers to multiple people. 'Experiment' should be plural 'experiments' to match 'various'.

× I already mentioned you. I work as a lab assistant at Archive Sciences school where I help student with various experiments and different project work.

✓ I already mentioned it to you. I work as a lab assistant at Archive Sciences School where I help students with various experiments and different project work.

The phrase 'mentioned you' is incorrect; it should be 'mentioned it to you'. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'School' is a proper noun and should be capitalized as 'School'.

× Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment around around the school is a very greenery and very friendly.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment around the school is very green and very friendly.

The word 'greenery' is a noun, but here an adjective 'green' is needed to describe the environment. Also, 'around' is repeated unnecessarily.

× Every staff ate call colleagues is very friendly now, which make me very comfortable to.

✓ Every staff member and all colleagues are very friendly, which makes me very comfortable too.

'Every staff ate call colleagues' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'Every staff member and all colleagues'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'which'. 'To' at the end is unnecessary; 'too' is correct.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because it is a school and it not not only student it also teaches me a lot of things like discipline and various research project which which additionally help in my studies too.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it is a school and it not only has students, it also teaches me a lot of things like discipline and various research projects which additionally help in my studies too.

The phrase 'it not not only student' is incorrect; it should be 'it not only has students'. 'Project' should be plural 'projects'. Repetition of 'which' is an error.

× Is I already told you that I am a student pursuing master degree in chemistry so I want to be a chemist in my future.

✓ I already told you that I am a student pursuing a master's degree in chemistry, so I want to be a chemist in the future.

The sentence starts incorrectly with 'Is'. It should start with 'I'. Also, 'master degree' should be 'master's degree'. 'In my future' is better expressed as 'in the future'.

× I will work as a chemist as a chemist in a pharmaceutical company or any factories related related any factories in.

✓ I will work as a chemist in a pharmaceutical company or any related factories.

The phrase 'as a chemist as a chemist' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Related related any factories in' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'related factories'.