Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fix grammar and pronunciation errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct articles and verb forms, and split long information into one or two supporting sentences using linking words. Include specific duties as brief examples.

예시: I work as an accountant in the finance department at a company in Central. I work full time from 9:00 to 5:00, and my main duties involve preparing monthly financial reports and managing daily invoicing. For example, I reconcile accounts and produce cash-flow statements each month.

제안: Answer directly with location, then add one clear supporting detail. Avoid unfinished sentences and vague endings. Use linking words (because, so) to explain. Be specific about commuting and your preference.

예시: I work in Central on Hong Kong Island, and I commute there by MTR. Because trains are very crowded during peak hours, I usually leave earlier to avoid the heaviest rush.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation, and use precise vocabulary (diverse, colleagues from different countries). Support your opinion with 1–2 specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like because and for example.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because the company is very diverse and inclusive. For example, I collaborate with colleagues from Japan, India and the UK on cross-border projects, which helps me learn different working styles.

제안: This answer is short and direct, which is good, but you can strengthen it by adding one specific reason. Use a linking phrase to connect your feeling to a supporting detail.

예시: Yes, I love the place where I work because my team is supportive and I have opportunities to learn new skills, such as financial modelling and monthly budgeting.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your career goal, use correct verb forms (e.g., 'are to get promoted' or 'I hope to become'), and give specific actions or timeline. Avoid incomplete phrases and unclear endings; explain how you will achieve the goal and what responsibilities you expect.

예시: My future plan is to be promoted to a manager within the next three years. To achieve this, I am improving my leadership skills by taking a management course and leading small projects; as a manager I would supervise a team of five to ten and handle project planning and problem-solving.

× I work as an an accountant in central and uh I'm in the finance department and work full time from 9:00 to 5:00 every day in the office and my roads involves preparing financial reports and manage daily invoicing and routine and.

✓ I work as an accountant in Central and I'm in the finance department. I work full time from 9:00 to 5:00 every day in the office, and my role involves preparing financial reports and managing daily invoicing and routine tasks.

Errors: double article 'an an' should be single 'an'; 'central' as a place name should be capitalized 'Central'; run-on sentence lacks punctuation and clear clause boundaries; 'roads' is a typo for 'role'; subject-verb agreement: 'my role involves' (singular subject); parallel verb form: 'preparing' and 'managing' should both be gerunds to match structure; missing noun for 'routine' -> 'routine tasks'. Suggestion: Use one article, capitalize proper nouns, split into sentences for clarity, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use parallel gerund forms for lists of duties.

× I work in central which I commute by MTR and there's a lot of people during peak hours so I would prefer.

✓ I work in Central, which I commute to by MTR, and there are a lot of people during peak hours, so I would prefer not to travel then.

Errors: missing preposition 'to' after 'commute'; 'Central' should be capitalized; relative clause 'which I commute by MTR' is awkward—use 'commute to by MTR'; 'there's' is singular contraction but refers to 'a lot of people' (plural) so use 'there are' — subject-verb agreement; sentence ends incomplete 'so I would prefer' needs an object or clause. Suggestion: Add missing preposition, correct subject-verb agreement, complete the sentence to express preference.

× Well, I think it's a good place to work because the company is quite diversified. I get many different variety, ethics of people to work with and I like working with, umm, different countries of people. So I enjoyed it very much.

✓ Well, I think it's a good place to work because the company is quite diverse. I meet many different types of people to work with, and I like working with people from different countries. So I enjoy it very much.

Errors: 'diversified' is less natural here than adjective 'diverse'; 'I get many different variety' is ungrammatical—use 'many different types' or 'a wide variety of'; 'ethics of people to work with' is incorrect collocation; 'different countries of people' should be 'people from different countries'; tense mismatch 'So I enjoyed it' should be present 'I enjoy it' to match ongoing situation. Suggestion: Use 'diverse', 'types' or 'a variety of', correct collocations, and keep consistent present tense for current preferences.

× I get many different variety, ethics of people to work with and I like working with, umm, different countries of people.

✓ I meet many different types of people to work with, and I like working with people from different countries.

Errors: 'get' is acceptable but 'meet' is more natural; subject-verb issue not primary here but plural noun agreement and collocation problems exist: 'many different variety' is incorrect ('variety' singular) and must be 'many different varieties' or 'many different types'; 'ethics of people' is incorrect phrase. Suggestion: Use plural nouns where needed and more natural collocations like 'types of people' and 'people from different countries'.

× So I enjoyed it very much.

✓ So I enjoy it very much.

Error: past tense 'enjoyed' implies the enjoyment is finished. The student is describing a current, ongoing feeling about their workplace, so the present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual or current states.

× My future work plans would be get promoted to a manager so I could manage a team of five to 10 people inside my company and I would be a leader role to solve.

✓ My future work plan is to get promoted to a manager so I can manage a team of five to ten people in my company and take on a leadership role to solve problems.

Errors: incorrect modal and infinitive structure: 'would be get promoted' should be 'is to get promoted' or 'would be to get promoted'; use 'to get promoted' as infinitive after 'plan'; 'would be a leader role to solve' is ungrammatical—use 'take on a leadership role to solve problems'; 'could' suggests ability but present intention uses 'can' or 'will'; 'five to 10' should use consistent number formatting 'five to ten'. Suggestion: Use 'plan is to' + infinitive structure, choose appropriate modal ('can' or 'will') for intended meaning, and complete the object 'solve problems'.