Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and company name if needed.

예시: I currently work as a cleaning supervisor at J Gill Maintenance Company, and I’ve held this position for about three years. It’s a challenging job, but over time I’ve developed the skills to handle difficult situations. For example, I manage cleaning teams for hospitals and malls, which requires strict standards and good organization.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronoun use, and add a specific detail about the workplace. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: I work at J Gill Maintenance Company as a cleaning supervisor. The company provides cleaning and maintenance services for superstores, hospitals and shopping malls, so my role involves coordinating teams across different sites. I’ve been with the company for about three years.

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a clear opinion, then one or two reasons with specific examples. Correct awkward phrases and grammar, and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, it’s a good place to work because you can gain practical experience in hygiene and hospitality. For instance, they require two years’ cleaning experience for supervisory roles, which I gained through part-time work, and the company offers benefits like training and steady hours.

제안: Give a direct answer and support it with specific, natural reasons. Fix idiomatic errors and unnecessary repetition. Keep to 3–4 sentences max and use linking words to connect points.

예시: Yes, I like working there because it provides a stable income and opportunities for promotion. I always try to be honest and dedicated, and as a result I was promoted from cleaner to supervisor over time. The job also offers training that I find useful.

제안: State your plan clearly, give a reason and a specific action or timeline, and correct grammar. Use linking words to show progression from current job to future goal.

예시: Although I’ve worked as a cleaning supervisor for about three years, I plan to move into the IT sector because I have a Computing Smart diploma with high grades. Therefore, I’m currently applying for entry-level IT roles and taking online courses to build relevant skills, and I hope to transition within the next year or two.

× Currently I've work as a cleaning supervisor at jail maintenance company.

✓ Currently I've been working as a cleaning supervisor at J Gill Maintenance Company.

The original uses 'I've work' which is incorrect because 'have' + verb requires a past participle (present perfect) or 'have been' + present participle for ongoing action. The student means an ongoing job, so use present perfect continuous: 'I've been working'. Also corrected company name capitalization and spelling. Suggest practicing: 'I have been working...' for actions that started in the past and continue now.

× I have been there at this position for 2-3 years now.

✓ I have been in this position for 2-3 years now.

The phrase 'there at this position' is incorrect. Use 'in this position' to indicate role. This is a prepositional/phrase usage issue categorized under 'There be issue'. Suggest: say 'I have been in this position for...'. Also keep number format consistent (two to three years).

× I enjoy my work, it is challenging, however with the experience and time, I became an expert to face any challenge.

✓ I enjoy my work; it is challenging. However, with experience and time, I have become able to face any challenge.

Mixes simple past 'became' with present relevance. The correct tense is present perfect ('have become') to show a change over time leading to the present. Also 'an expert to face' is awkward; 'have become able to face' or 'became an expert at facing' is better. Suggest using present perfect for past actions with present results.

× It managed the maintenance at the superstores, hospitals and malls.

✓ It manages maintenance at superstores, hospitals, and malls.

The company is being described generally, so use simple present 'manages' (third person singular) not past 'managed'. Also remove 'the' before plural general nouns and adjust punctuation. Suggest: 'It manages maintenance at superstores, hospitals, and malls.'

× As I earlier mentioned, I am working as a cleaning supervisor at J Gill Maintenance Company.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I work as a cleaning supervisor at J Gill Maintenance Company.

'As I earlier mentioned' is awkward; 'As I mentioned earlier' is natural. For habitual/current job use simple present 'I work' or present perfect continuous. 'I am working' is not wrong but 'I work' is better for permanent employment. Suggest reordering adverb and using simple present for general facts.

× Yes, definitely if you're exploring your field to the hygienic and house hospitality section then you are good to do this job.

✓ Yes, definitely. If you are exploring the hygiene and hospitality sector, then this job is suitable for you.

Incorrect prepositions and word choices: 'exploring your field to' should be 'exploring the ... sector'; 'hygienic and house hospitality section' is unnatural — use 'hygiene and hospitality sector'. 'Good to do this job' -> 'suitable for you'. Suggest learning common collocations: 'exploring the X sector' and 'suitable for someone'.

× However, to achieve the supervisor inspiration you must need 2 years experience in the cleaning which I received in the part time job.

✓ However, to be promoted to a supervisor position you need two years' experience in cleaning, which I gained in a part-time job.

'Must need' is redundant; use 'need' or 'must have'. Also 'supervisor inspiration' is incorrect phrase; use 'supervisor position' or 'promotion to supervisor'. '2 years experience' needs possessive apostrophe 'years'' and hyphenate 'part-time'. 'Received' is awkward; 'gained' or 'earned' is better. Suggest: 'you need two years' experience' or 'you must have two years' experience'.

× So it is a good place you can get various benefits from the job.

✓ So it is a good place where you can get various benefits from the job.

Missing relative pronoun 'where' to link 'place' and the clause. Add 'where' to form correct relative clause. Suggest: 'a good place where you can get...' or 'a good job where you can get...'.

× It puts on that food on my table.

✓ It puts food on my table.

Redundant 'on' after 'puts' and incorrect 'that' usage. The correct phrase is 'puts food on my table' meaning provides for me. Suggest using 'provides for me' or 'puts food on the table'.

× I always work with my full honesty and dedication.

✓ I always work with honesty and dedication.

'My full honesty' is awkward; 'honesty and dedication' are uncountable nouns describing manner. Keep simple present. Suggest: 'I always work with honesty and dedication.'

× Only because of that I was promoted from basic cleaner to the cleaning supervisor overtime.

✓ Because of that I was promoted from basic cleaner to cleaning supervisor over time.

'Overtime' (one word) means extra hours; intended meaning is 'over time' (two words). Also 'the cleaning supervisor' should be 'cleaning supervisor' without 'the'. Suggest using 'over time' to indicate gradual promotion.

× As I have been working as a cleaning supervisor for round three years now, I am exploring my job opportunities in the Information technology field.

✓ As I have been working as a cleaning supervisor for around three years now, I am exploring job opportunities in the information technology field.

Typo 'round' -> 'around'. 'Information technology' should not be capitalized in this context. 'My job opportunities' -> 'job opportunities'. Tense is okay (present perfect continuous + present progressive 'am exploring'). Suggest small vocabulary fixes.

× I have Computing Smart diploma completed at higher grade.

✓ I have completed a Computing Smart diploma with a high grade.

Original word order is incorrect. Use present perfect 'I have completed' + object 'a Computing Smart diploma' and prepositional phrase 'with a high grade'. 'Higher grade' is vague; 'a high grade' is clearer. Suggest practicing correct verb + object order: 'have completed a ...'.

× So I am planning to move to the IT companies in the recent years.

✓ So I am planning to move to IT companies in the near future.

'In the recent years' is incorrect for future intention. Use 'in the near future' to indicate upcoming plans. Also 'move to the IT companies' -> 'move to IT companies' or 'move into an IT company'. Suggest using 'in the near future' for upcoming plans.