Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "different schedule planning" -> "scheduling"), and limit to up to five sentences.

예시: I work as a supervisor at a construction company in Jabal, Nepal. I oversee project scheduling and forecasting, and I manage the labor team. Because of my role, I coordinate daily tasks and ensure projects stay on schedule.

제안: Correct factual/place name confusion (Japan vs Jabal) and remove fillers like 'uh'. Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the company and location, then give two specific examples of projects using linking words (e.g., "for example", "such as"). Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: I work as a supervisor at Raj Builders Private Limited in Jabal, Nepal. It is a B-class construction company that works with the government, for example on bridges and rural roads, and it has also built several government buildings.

제안: Use correct word choices ("communicative" or "friendly" instead of "commutative") and avoid repeating time words. Start directly and then give one specific reason using linking words. Mention how flexibility benefits you briefly.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because my coworkers are very supportive and communicative. In addition, the working hours are flexible — I usually start at 11:00 AM, which helps me balance personal responsibilities.

제안: Fix vocabulary and sentence endings ("working environment", "staff"), remove fillers, and complete unfinished thoughts. Give one clear reason and a concise example. Use linking words like "for example" and avoid vague adjectives like "calming" when describing people.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because the working environment is positive and the staff are cooperative. For example, the laborers I supervise are respectful and follow instructions promptly, which makes projects run smoothly.

제안: Be specific and correct expressions (e.g., "large A-class companies"), remove repetition, and use precise examples of desired roles or goals. State a clear plan and a reason using linking words like "because" or "so that". Keep it within five sentences.

예시: In the future I plan to join a large A-class construction company in Nepal, such as Kalika Construction. I want to gain experience on major infrastructure projects like national highways so that I can manage larger teams and more complex sites.

× I oversee different schedule planning, forecasting and as well as manage laborers.

✓ I oversee different schedule planning and forecasting, and I also manage laborers.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: the original sentence mixes parallel items improperly ('and as well as manage' is ungrammatical). Use parallel structure and include the subject for the second verb to ensure clarity and correct agreement. Suggestion: keep coordinate verbs parallel ('oversee... and manage') or add 'I' before 'manage'.

× I work as a supervisor in Raj Builders Private Limited which is located in Japan, Nepal.

✓ I work as a supervisor at Raj Builders Private Limited, which is located in Jabal, Nepal.

Wrong place name and preposition choice: 'in Japan, Nepal' is likely incorrect (probably meant 'Jabal, Nepal') and the company is normally described with the preposition 'at'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is located...' to improve grammar.

× It is a B class construction company which uh works with the government to build bridges, small roads in the villages area and we have constructed different government buildings too.

✓ It is a B-class construction company that works with the government to build bridges and small roads in village areas, and we have constructed various government buildings as well.

Sentence structure and word choice: run-on and informal fillers ('uh') make the sentence unclear. Use 'that' for a defining clause or 'which' with comma for nondefining; here 'that' is appropriate. Use hyphen in 'B-class', parallel list construction ('bridges and small roads'), correct noun phrase 'village areas', and avoid repetition with 'as well' at end.

× Yes, it is a very good place to work with the coworkers who are very commutative and supportive.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to work; the coworkers are very communicative and supportive.

Incorrect word choice and sentence structure: 'commutative' is wrong; likely meant 'communicative'. Also 'place to work with the coworkers' is awkward; split into two clauses for clarity.

× And also I have to reach the office by 11:00 AM in the morning, so there the time is also flexible for me.

✓ Also, I have to reach the office by 11:00 AM, so the schedule is flexible for me.

Adverb placement and redundancy: 'AM in the morning' is redundant. 'There the time is also flexible for me' has incorrect word order; 'the schedule is flexible for me' is clearer. Place adverb 'also' at sentence start or after subject.

× Yes, The Walking environment in my place is very excellent as all the coworkers and Staffs are very supportive and coordinative with me.

✓ Yes, the working environment at my workplace is excellent because all the coworkers and staff are very supportive and cooperative with me.

Article and word choice errors: 'The' should be lowercase 'the' and 'Walking' is incorrect for 'working'. 'Staffs' is incorrect plural; use 'staff' (uncountable). 'Coordinative' is awkward; 'cooperative' is correct. Also use 'at my workplace' for clarity.

× Uh, for example, the laborers uh, that I worked with are very calming, peaceful, and they do not hesitate to.

✓ For example, the laborers I work with are very calm and peaceful, and they do not hesitate to ask questions or follow instructions.

Sentence fragment and word choice: remove filler 'uh'. 'That I worked with' mismatches tense with present context; use 'I work with'. 'Calming' describes causing calm; use 'calm'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'do not hesitate to.' Complete the idea (e.g., 'ask questions' or 'follow instructions') to avoid a fragment.

× So talking about my future work plans, I am planning to join Big Big A class construction company here in Nepal such as Kalika Construction which are involved in building different big construction sites such as Action highways.

✓ Talking about my future work plans, I am planning to join a big A-class construction company here in Nepal, such as Kalika Construction, which is involved in building large construction projects like major highways.

Present tense and agreement errors, articles and word choice: use 'a big A-class construction company' (article and adjective order), avoid repeated words ('big Big'), and ensure subject-verb agreement ('which is involved' not 'which are involved' when referring to Kalika Construction). Replace 'different big construction sites such as Action highways' with clearer phrase 'large construction projects like major highways'.